by SweetOblivion
Love the images and the clever, cute ending. You really seem to understand the form to me: the way you flow sentences across lines makes this sonnet readable and lyrical. I really enjoyed reading it.
Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Reviews thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum.
but GOOD sonnets are next to impossible. This is quite, quite good, and doesn't have the stilted construction that hurts the form. Very well done.