by sack
as i'm sold on this image:
And the fat women laugh as their cheeks jiggle
hamburger juice trickling down double chins
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overall it is a smoking poem......don
I Love the simplicity.
Your wording is spot on.
I look and see*
Great flow, and super great wording~!!
More Please~
gave me such mixed emotions. I smiled, I laughed and then I felt sad. I had such a tugging in my heart...
~Honey
Oh, this is good, sack! I was right there with you. Great poetry!
I really like these lines:
And the fat women laugh as their cheeks jiggle
hamburger juice trickling down double chins
What an image, and an awesome ending! What I'd call a killer one! Well done!
What a wonderful way of viewing your surroundings. The world as a window. The many varied things to be looked at, examined and comtemplated. Beautiful with rich images.