All Comments on 'Woman, woman'

Well written words and a lovely, heartfelt tribute. Thanks

this was wonderful, but if i can give some advice..and only bcuz i'm learning it myself, there's some wasted words..try

tightening up your phrases..make it sharper..it'll help the flow. enjoyable read!

And the fawnster gave you some good advice.

Try taking this:

Leaving me drained -

Fit only for uneasy sleep.

Longing,

Despairing,

Hopeful but fearful

Of this unspeakable love,

Woman for woman.

and doing this to it:

Leaving me drained -

fit only for uneasy sleep

of this unspeakable love,

Woman for woman.

Don't be afraid to leave some words out.

Your poetry is, to me, the essence of poetry, that which speaks of what our being is, what is within.