by writedoctor
great story, keep going please, and never mind people that cut down your story that arnt brave enuff to leave there name.
I didn't see the first version of this and therefore cannot comment on that. I thought this story was very well written and really saw nothing that I thought needed changing. Keep up the good work.
Don't care wht any one says,,, I really enjoyed this & loved the ecounter.... Would love to have been Paul..
Was horny all the way through
, loved it and I wished that I was the one that Gwen was taking for the first time
So I started with the first story on his list and it looks as though I hit a winner.
A great description of a great encounter.
Great writing - I can only imagine how hot it would be to take his position. Tom - ttinphx@yahoo.com
Your words paint lovely pictures of pleasure and lust. Thank you for them!
What a deliciously sexy story! I was captivated and drawn into this most erotic and sexy story right from the beginning...made me wish I was Paul...hmmmm ;)
Definitely one of my favorite stories and I'm looking forward to reading more from this author...thank you for such a sensuous and erotic read, writedoctor!
This story is great! I have been rereading it over and over. Extremely thrilling....truly would love to be Paul!!!
Great story! Like the reciprocation. I've only been dominant to this point, but although I'm not a virgin, I would love to be pounded and filled. Then take turns again and again
I really hope they get back together. Very romantic love story. Wish I was as lucky as Paul.
Yes !
This was a pleasant, somewhat rushed at times, but really enjoyable story.
Being a T gurl myself, I enjoyed the way Gwen handled the entire situation.
Though the ending sounded like she was acting, it was still a good read.
After doing some editing and proofreading this morning, I chanced upon this already read little story.
This tidbit of intoxicating writing had drawn me in again.
There were a few places in the lines that I felt needed rewriting, So I worked the bits of erotica over in my mind to smooth them out to my liking, before continuing my journey of reading.
This writing is obviously an aid for masterbating, but it is done with class.
Gone from this story is the rough, rushed, raunchy, sometimes edging on disgusting gutter wash so many authors here on Literotica, seem to think is good writing. Although some readers express their delight with such trash !
All I can say is "To each their own !"
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