by GigiDark
I liked the fact that you took your time with it and let us get to know the characters. Keep up the good work!
The story is a great read, but the ending is unsatisfying, like coitus interruptus.
Thanks for your comment. I tried to make it a good read. I'm sorry about the coitus interruptus. I will think about it for my other stories.
Thank you for the encouraging comments. This was my first erotic story ever. I just wrote something that I'd like to read. I was also worried about page count when I realized that my story which was only supposed to be 5 pages turned into 11. I didn't want to write a novella amidst all the great pithy stories in this competition.
I just wanted to say thank you to all of the people who read my story. At last count I believe I had over 8000 views. Wow! I never dreamed it would get that many views. I also wanted to thank Warrenm for favoriting my story you rock! And of course I thank those of you who gave me comments - they are truly food for thought. I will use these comments to make more entertaining future submissions.
Since the competition is drawing to a close I sure would appreciate some votes if you think this was a good submission.