All Comments on 'A Gift From His Father Ch. 11'

Loved the new chapter

Nice. Can't wait to see what happens next.

nice job man. but i honestly think that you can be more creative. and what happened with the bank plot?

Omg i have read this series all day awesome. just doesn't even come close but damn it there isn't more to read yet keep up the good work. If any who reads this series. and says its no good thay can go fuck them selves. lol truly epic keep it up

I have read all of them and they are great,glad you decided to continue adding more Chapter and can't wait for the new ones.

In the first chapter we were told that the ring was powered by two things: good deeds and sexual energy. Seems to be a severe lack of the former.

Anything one of the agents does with power provided by the ring would have to count as a deed done by the ring master.

Also, what's up with the bank? We went from knowing he was planning to take down the president (? Mr. Adams ?) to suddenly that's all done. Was he able to help his neighbors with their mortgages?

dam, you commenters are soooooooo rude!!!!!!! if you dont like the authors writing, story flow, plot or spelling skills, go find another author to harass. i dont recall that the author was bragging how perfect they were...as a matter of fact i distinctly remember a post in the comments section that said they had agreed to your requests....LIGHTEN UP PEOPLE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

However, I am wondering why the story follows Rachel so much. She's not particularly likable, hasn't been established as significant, and she (and Erica) aren't very attractive. I don't even dislike it so much as I am curious about why its there.

This may be a little late, but you could really use an editor! You repeated misuse "virginal" instead of "vaginal", and there are some other misuses I've noticed. Plus sometimes using "he" instead of "she", which is offputting.

Better story than I could write, though! Keep going, but get an editor, please.

I don't notice the editorial mistakes as much as others so I'm just going to say this is another great story. I love the fact that you keep this moving along.

What happened to Adams?

You should have not bothered to continue to write about Rachael and the other woman. Not pertinent to the story. Waste of your effort and waste of the reader's time. I started skipping paragraphs.

Oh, Karen naked on the hotel room bed, Tammy looking lustfully at her, about to enjoy Karens pussy, ... and the chapter just ends, ... Cliffhanger, or a Clit-hanger? Still having the same old problems, especially with tenses, but it is an enjoyably good story, ... thank you, ... ;-) TTFN

Hahaha! Someone posted anonymously that they had started skipping over the paragraphs about Rachel. Dude, after struggling through the first three chapters, I started skipping the entire piece of crap story. I'm just jumping to the end of each one to slap a 1/5 vote for each installment.

Have your writing edited please… too many errors… why are you writing so long about Rachel and Erica? You could make this shorter, as it is not that important to the story…actually not needed, as you already established the personality trades of Erica. I read your story before and know Erica will become a important character, so it’s ok to introduce here, but not that lengthy… story is a blast 💥 5 stars ⭐️ thank you