by Kezza67
Very special erotic story! Couldn't stop reading it! Thanks!
This was like living part of my life over again. Playing on the bomb sites in South East London after the war, drinking tea, which I still do in great quantities, and visiting soho for the first time, and doing a 'runner' when we realised one of us 'accidentally' hadn't paid. Even trying to 'pull' one of the strippers in a pub afterwards, but unsuccessfully I have to add.
The arrival of computors, and programing in fortran 2D (if I remember correctly), and huge stacks of puch cards, which you fed into a huge machine in a special air conditioned room.
Then France!
I`ve now lived and worked in France for the last seventeen years, and I even own not one, but two of those diabolical hydraulic suspensioned Citreon cars. The famous Citreon DS, one of them a fabulous DS21 Pallas from1969 which we've just restored, and I drive regularly around the countryside.
Very brave to try the French like that. I did understand it, though it wasn't exactly the French that I use every day __ mais ca va. Just a tad formal (and that's the same word in French as well)
Manifique! __ Tres bon effort ___ merci bien!
I can't get this damn program to change this comment from Anonymous to my username -------
Britease
You're displaying all of your considerable talent as a writer. Loved it! Will be looking for more. BRAVO!!
I address this to the anonymous reader who tells me I'm an Idiot for using terms like Mum or Mummy. May I point out to you something you missed. The story was set in 1960's Britain, when those terms were commonly used, but of course you were so concerned with your bigotry you didn't see that.To those who actually read my story and took the trouble to comment, thankyou.
This is a work of art. The characters are utterly credible and the story draws one in. To write a credible erotic tale requires some skill, but to extend the story into an extended eight-chapter book requires serious talent. Encore! Encore!
thank you for this submission, I loved the detail and the emotion you put into this story. once I started reading I couln not stop. absolutely wonderful. I am looking.forward to more stories from you.........Renegade
The story was captivated from start to finish. It also was exhilarating to see that Danny and Len finally made everything work in their relationship and lives. The only problem that was it was a long piece to read but it was worth every minute.
Hi Kezza! Really fell in love with Len!
You did a brilliant job, thank you!
It made me cry thinking of the man I love, but who is married to someone else. Very good work. Please dont stop - D
That story is definately and 11. It is without a doubt one of the best storys I have read here. I was actually involved in it like I would be a good novel.
I had no idea where it was going but I certainly enjoyed the ride. Your re-creation of immediate post war England and the early days of the computer industry rang quite a few of my bells. Well done and thanks!
Great job Kezza. One of the best stories I`ve ever read. Thank you for this wonderful pice of art, siriously..it made me cry in the end.
Very well written and imagined. It was a surprise box
of moments worth treasuring.
At the beginning, I was wondering why a man would be falling for a stripper. Then I wondered how Danny, being married, was going to be able to spend time with Len, without being adulterous. I had several other questions as the story unfolded, but your storytelling ability held my interest until all my questions were answered, and then some. It was a great story--romantic as well as erotic. Thanks for writing it.
Thank you for this lovely story. It isn't exactly the kind of story I expect from Literotica, but I did enjoy it very much, reading "Len" to learn how the tale would unravel, finding pleasure in the characters as they are revealed, and being satisfied by the clarity of the writing (though I'm not sure that the translations from the French were necessary).
Thank you for a good tale well told.
ILienBagby
This is undoubtedly the best story I have read in all of Litrotica, it deserves more than 5 stars. The story flow, the verbal description are outstanding. The gentle tension and story twists were well planned. PLEASE write more.
Very well done. Excellent character development and plotting. I really enjoyed this, the first of your stories that I've read. Thank you for sharing!! [Gualterio]
Herein you've incorporated an abundance of the aspects that make a story a GREAT read. If there is anything not to love about Len I am totally oblivious because from my perspective (as well as many other Lit readers) this is one of the best stories on the site. Superb, heartwarming ending.
Well done Kezza and hopefully more from you will be coming our way.
Thank you very much!
Thank you Kezza67 for one of the best stories I have ever read on this site! Bravo!!!
the word love while conveys a general feeling, my fiancee and I often get into this and all I can say that like my feelings for my lady, the care of those around the two characters meet that same level--infinity + 1. we have just been witness to a strong romance and love story all woven together
Bravo say I Bravo '
If this had been fired from a gun, it wouldn't have been a sniper's rifle, it would have been a twelve gauge shotgun. Both barrels! You put everything in there, held nothing back. You took my emotions up, down, and sideways, exercising my feelings as Danny did to Len the night of her Big O.
And then on page five you planted that paragraph about how the Americans, British, and French make and drink their coffee. Fortunately I had just set my drink down on the coffee table when I came to the description of American coffee as jet fuel, or I would have sprayed whiskey all over my new carpet. My two small dogs, sleeping peacefully while I read, woke up and looked at me as if I were crazy, whooping with laughter as I went through that paragraph.
It's late now, but I shall write you a private message soon. For now, I'll just say that I am overjoyed to have found your stories. Thank you for sharing them with me.
You're right - your French is not up to par. But the rest of the story is wonderful, c'est à dire, magnifique!
This has been one of the BEST Stories I've ever read on this Site…
And I've read literally OVER a Thousand here (Retirement has it's benefits…)
A simple easy going guy with not much special just his integrity and determination to do right - FUCKED over - but saved by the beauty pof youth and love unfulfilled - maybe unfulfillable??
BUT no it is to be completed and the woman is beyond true - to the point of impossible to believe - but still true - all the bizarre and wonder - and a great ending - it Just got to me -
Thanks -
Perhaps a little trite (his divorce was almost too easy), but it was a well-written and well-told tale.
Thank you.
HP
How you manage to consistently write one wonderful high quality story after another is just amazing. In addition they are all unique. You are not a cookie cuter author.
Good show! I enjoyed your story immensely. I was dismayed by the rape of Leanne, but it was part of the tale and is what it is. Your sex scenes were well presented and not somewhat held back as some U.K. writers have done. I must check out your story listings for more entertainment. Thanks! Cheers!
Love your writing! You bring for the essence of romance without the blatant and tawdry sexual writings! Leaving much to the readers imagination! Good job!
......... with LEANNE.
A 'deadly' combination of innocence & playfulness. No wonder its a tale of times gone by.
They just don't make them like that anymore.lol.
A 5, for sure.
Loved "ABBY", "TIME ONCE MORE FOR MARILYN" and other stories you have written. I came about this one by chance. Well, you wrote it, I wanted to read it as well. Like your others, it was well written. Not disappointed. Please continue writing. Love your stories.
It would help if you can write. 1* !
A moving tale told brilliantly, well crafted and with perfect pace. Good job recreating an era quickly fading into history. I empathize with Len as l, too, found no pleasure of my own in sexual matters and wondered why any woman would voluntarily endure the pain. What was wrong with me? Unfortunately I didn't find my 'Danny' who gave me my first orgasm til I was past 50! Of course, now I realize it wasn't me but rather my previous partners' clumsy efforts. I'm rapidly making up for lost time though. ;-D
Heartfelt and very nice.
Ignore the 1-crowd. It's a bloody good tale.
HP
The rape at the end was completely forced. (I know what I did there.)
Also, what I don't get is, why is aborting the rapist's spawn or even taking a morning after pill not even considered as an option?
This is actually a problem as retaining an unwanted pregnancy seems to be a go-to theme running throughout the Literotica author's community. I guess logic goes for a toss when it comes to artistic license.
You realize this story took place like in the 70's or possibly before (sorry, I don't recall the exact time). Remember, Len was surprised that Danny had a shower in his place. Back then the social mindset was extremely conservative, so I really don't think abortion was an option. Mind you, not exactly sure about this either, but I don't think the morning after pill existed back then. Another thing to point out is that Len was so emotionally distressed and overwhelmed by the experience she probably couldn't think rationally, assuming the ma pill existed.
That issue aside, this will always be one of my favourite stories on Lit. Well deserved five stars, hands down. And no, I don't think the rape was "forced". Lol I had a good chuckle over that, Anon.
Oui, une grande histoire (I spoke French also)
Yes, a great story.
Regarding the comment of another reader, why Len did not have an abortion, or take the morning-after pill, the reader should take into account the date on which the story unfolds, abortion was illegal, and the pill then there was not invented yet.
I find this story is a romantic drama with a happy ending.
I liked it a lot.
5* for you.
I apologize for my English (French also), is not my native language.
love and romance make a good story better.
I wish Len had not endured the travesty, had come to the decision to retire and support him in his new business on her own. She didn't need the trauma.
The cynic in me has to ask if the rape was included to have Danny choose to marry and stay with Len shortly after divorcing his wife rather than raise the child of another man.
The first six and a half was a beautiful building romance, then it was destroyed by the rape, an innocence was lost that ruined the sweetness of the story, worse it was boring, a whole dry bit of 'telling rather than showing'.
As a plot device and a way to add drama, rape is a poor and tasteless one.
Len had unwillingly shared something with another man that until this point was exclusive to the one she loved
Then that dreary situation is compunded by Len carrying the baby of her rapist, an eternal reminder.
If the author wanted them to have children they could always have adopted, instead of having Danny's wife, in both marriages, carrying another man's child.
It went from a five star story to a two star ending for me.
Re the comments on Len’s rape: why should the incident be essentially regarded as non-mentionable? If the rapist got his just desserts and/or died, then who cares? At least Danny did an honourable thing, especially since he couldn’t father children. A lovely story with more than a touch of reality One comment appeared to imply condoning rape. Perhaps the guy should re-think his attitude to women
But then, they all are from this author. We readers can just enjoy.
Such a wonderfully poignant story.
So beautifully crafted
Five stars once again
A lovely piece of art from a time when we all fumbled around with sex, not knowing what to do. Thank you.
Love the characters and story, but you might want to look into getting an editor. The line breaks before the dialogue make it hard to keep track of who is talking and some other errors took me out of the story.
Keep this up and you are going places!
Real people in real life romances.
How dare a lay reader as myself comment on such a nice piece of writing? Of course I would love to have the ability of writing with you skills, even in my native languages (Spanish or Portuguese). But then I feel that I owe you at least my poorly written comments in return for your very nice story.
Having lived in London some decades ago and knowing some of the towns and places you mention put me in contact with a very concrete setting of your story. I wonder how you manage to describe places casually enough to not interrupt the flow of the story while connecting the reader with the settings, whether in Devon, on the train to Paddington or in a bistrot in Paris.
I didn't experience war time England, but we had a nice lady downstairs which was of that time and shared with us her stories when we went for a stroll, she on her wheelchair, we with our baby stroller. Your remembrances resonated with hers.
And then there is your dealing with "your" wife's infidelity, your attitude so attuned with a culture quite different from the American one we so frequently see reflected here. In spite of some shallow comments above, your dealing with sterility, infidelity and with rape reflect a humanitarian view of social relations with which I very much identified.
I arrived looking for a stripper story and I got a much richer experience.
Thanks!
I like the pace of the storytelling and characterisations, even if the prose is a little pedestrian in parts. Like a few of the other commenters, I'm not a fan of the rape storyline which reads as a plot device rather than as a piece of the rest of the story. And even if it had to be included, the lack of discussion on whether or not to abort the product of rape is a serious omission (abortion was legalised in England in 1967, so would have been an option, given the timeline of this story)
This is the second time that I’ve read this and the second time that it moved me to tears. Bravo.
There are not many stories on Literotica that aren't mostly titillating sex, and then also great romance. Kezza67 has manged to this repeatedly, both raising the readers excitement with tremendous story line while warming our hearts and bringing hope for a better future.
Thanks for a super read!
The Hoary Cleric