by Talemaster
This story is a whole lot more fun than should be legal! Thank you for sharing it, I can't wait to see what happens next.
In terms of Erotica pretty poor, but a well written story. Maybe it will improve in terms of erotic content, but so far not good.
I write to entertain my readers and I don't shy away from sex, but if you are looking for fifteen inch cocks, the diameter of a beer can, pounding arseholes or BDSM you will be disappointed. I'm not that kind of a writer. Sorry.
Best story ever loved it make 100 more please it is fucking Hilarius. 5 stars
Cheers mate, it's a bewdy. What's wrong with fifteen inch cocks pounding assholes? ;oP
Reminds me of Douglass Adams in the writing style. The irreverence shown to the gods is hilarious. I can't wait to see where this story goes.
What a rollicking great start to what I hope is a long series. I wait with bated breath. Truly, I had a terrific time reading chapter one.
This is wonderful! I was chuckling all through it.
Of course, we Americans find most Aussies funny anyways. To someone who isn't from Oz, the setting added a lot.
One tiny criticism: your dialog would benefit from the use of contractions. Maybe that's a regional thing, but I know that my own dialog tends to be a bit stiff if I don't remember to use contractions.
Just another fan. Brilliant!!!!!!!!! I want this story to be the one by which a couple of my friends who don't know about Literotica yet, get introduced to it. Wow.
I agree with all of these comments, not much more to say except keep up the good work. I love how your mind works. Also Please, more of the OFFSPRING series.
Aussie! Aussie! Oi! Oi! Oi!
That was funny as hell.
And you're Sydney bloke as well.
I live in Dulwich Hill!
I just could not stop laughing,fair dinkum,I,m expecting a roo in there somewhere,stone the crows and starve the lizards,it,s a bonzer yarn...Jay.
Yeah, I'd like a bit of Skippy. Keep those yucks coming! This is the first story of yours I've read, and I love it! Brilliant concept; reminds me of a book I read years ago called "Pandora's Planet"; also hilarious. In it Earth is invaded by aliens, but we end up ruling the galaxy because for the most part, the aliens are morons.
Anyhow, please ignore the idiot wanting stroke stories; you're way better than that!
I'm at a loss for words, great story, setting, and characters.
Man (or woman) I think it's a great story I love it but .. There's not really sex it's just like we shagged and then he wakes up.. Not very erotic at all js but I love it as a story so don't get me wrong
you may be on to something good or great or maybe even fuckin great! I feel I am reading a classic tongue in twat quest to entertain everyone. Could have named Zeus - Jack but that's the only improvement I see thus far.
jack
Gave 5 stars for making me laugh in the first paragraph(s). Keep up the work.
Good story and funny as fook, that said using words like “Wog” and “Poofter” in a funny story isn’t funny, as a Brit I grew up with those words and am painfully aware of their meaning.