All Comments on 'A Guy and His...? Ch. 05: Realization'

So far it's just a standard run of the mill genie story. You have my sympathy as it's a genre that has been well explored so it will be hard to come up with a new direction

This story gets me hard. And I've read plenty of crappy porn. Nice job!

You have the makings of a good story. I love the sex, but it's too much. There's not enough depth in the tale. If you honestly want to make the story stand out, be descriptive and go more in depth to describe the personalities and backgrounds of the characters. If not, it will become monotonous to the reader, and eventually will fade out of interest for you. I encourage you to rewrite this and put a stronger storyline, and make the characters memorable.

Do all Genie's try to Pimp out their masters?? Do Genie's get jealous? Are Genie's faithful?

Every now and then, a plain, old fashioned, adolescent, mastabatory fantasy is a pleasant distraction.

First part of this little story did not care for. Making him a super stud and screwing secretaries detracts from the story HMHO.