by sirhugs
Excellent. Need a little back story. Is the mother dead or divorced? Does he see the granddaughter? Why 18 years? There is a mystery here.
You still get 5 stars
Loved it. next chapter based in 12 months time when he is introduced to his now 18 almost 19yr old grand daughter. Is she as frightened of thunderstorms as her mummy.
The descriptions were really hard to picture in my head. Kind of took away from the enjoyment. If it wasn’t for that I would have may found it more of a turn on. Also 18 years? So he never saw his granddaughter? Giving you a 3.
Five Stars for your writing skills...I must also say that cream pies and blow jobs after anal intercourse are huge turnoffs!