All Comments on 'A "Shopping" Day'

Author, please accept this polite criticism: Please learn how to use parentheses. I was not able to tell who was talking in your story, nor when. That made it confusing and, with as much dialogue as you inserted, totally unreadable. I only lasted a few paragraphs before I quit the story.

i enjoyed the story, but i think U left unfinished, so i will be looking forward to the next chapter. please don't make us wait to long....thanx

I love it, keep writing!! :D

Kate *kiss*