All Comments on 'A Spirit Visits John'

The idea was good but wasn't devloped properly. it could have been done in a better manner.

Hopefully you plan writing and posting the second part of this story as I'd like to read it.

This story was well-written and entertaining. The lead-in was good, but I would suggest a little more info about the time period just before she goes back to see her brother.

I was surprised when the story ended on the note that they had made love all day and night. There was no suggestion of anything after their first get-together.

..."Jane", the car, the bj but nothing about how they felt 4 EACH OTHER! "Bakeboss". my ass, "barely rising" dough-dough is more like it.

i like the story but there isn't enough plot info on the characters. what's up with the end? I mean i hope that this isn't the end of the story and just the beginning of one

could have been better in the sci-fi area not incest

no no no how could you leave this story the way you did. come please end it right.

Would have been great if only there was proper punctuation and a little more detail. It reads too fast.