All Comments on 'A Welcomed Guest Ch. 02'

Was enjoying most of the story, but the method of referring to people as the man, the woman etc got too tiresome. Even the main character was called 'the man' all the time. I realise you wtitten quite few chapters but cant quite get any further than the start of this page. A real shame because it looked lije being an enjoyable tale.

I can understand some of your plot now, but the word choice, grammar, lack of character development, still missing protagonist name, and other things make for a difficult story to hold my interest. Even the sex scenes, which are your most descriptive scenes, need some work. I still don’t understand some things and that’s why I can’t keep reading. It just doesn’t hold my interest.

THANK YOU for a very fun story!! Do please continue!!

Why use "the man" as his name?