All Comments on 'A Welcomed Guest Ch. 10'

I don't mean that your work is shit, just that you're flinging it out there so fast!

I have mentioned before that you should get someone else to read your work before you post. It would SERIOUSLY improve the quality, there are tons of little mistakes that are very difficult to find if you proof your own work. The three stars reflect my opinion of your story. Very good indeed. Cleaned up, it may have gotten five. (?)