All Comments on 'A Wives Tale Pt. 02'

...Your storyline was excellent and you write really well (yes, I loved cisplain, so there), now for the 'but'... your ending comments explained a great deal, because what's missing is a dimension. Right now its just very 2 dimensional... it only needs some depth to turn this little romance into something MUCH more. It is a good storyline, next time... go through each element... character, place, whatev... and build it out. Obviously their previous marriage is a huge place to pull info, but you only touched on their being in school together, family ties... a bunch of pools there... now dive deep next time, hold your breath and see what characteristics you can salvage, who knows what you'll find. Thank you for sharing this, gave 5 stars for an excellent start, and I'll be waiting to see what you can build next time. Cheers! --- Josie

5 stars 1 more chapter please

Please don't listen to that Anon SOB.This was a very good erotic story that was far from boring. Some people cant get off unless there is pain or torment involved.

First let me get the critical bit out of the way. I thought I saw a few typos in there, though the worst I can find looking back is a "you're mouth" in there first part, so we'll assume I imagined the rest. That's minor though and quite forgivable heh.

Also, and I don't know if this actually counts as a criticism, I want to know where you find an apartment with a shower big enough to crawl in *grin*

Pedantry aside, my only complaint is that it is too short... After the initial trauma and shock (both necessary to setup the premise) your headlong dive into a flirty, playful reunion was enjoyable and felt perfectly natural. Your mixing of emotional character progression and sex scenes was smooth, both helped setup the other and neither felt forced. I'm just a little sad there's not more of there story to read.

Over all I think this story leans more towards the chick flick side of erotica than the hardcore porn side. Thanks for posting it.

There are so many variations of martial bliss...... a couple of friends from work. .. an act couple... could be added. Hasn't J ever thought about having a real live cocktail in her? The girl could be a playmate for both wives....

The game doesn't have to be over

If u want a cont. Thts ur choice but please keep writing

i like the story write more

A beautiful love story.

This was a good story and I enjoyed the premise. I do wish it would have been a longer drawn out tale tho. Rediscovering each other was fun, but would have liked to see a longer period of reminding each other and the love they shared. With that said, it’s still a good story and a must read. My biggest problem is that we didn’t get more stories from WillowxOC. It’s been 10 years since this story series was posted and I feel we have missed out on some very good stories.