All Comments on 'Abby, My Anal Loving Niece'

I love asian women!

Story's a bit long-winded but absolutely one of the best!

Keep writing...would love to hear more from ya!

Wow this is so hot. I'm 17 and half Chinese, and I want what she wants. Underage though! *runs away* hahaha.

Wow! Thanks you two! good comments are nice to hear. You think I should edit it down in general? I'm so glad people liked it.

Very nice, I enjoyed every bit of it. :)

Great story that is a naughty lil niece

very good story would love to read more

This is my second time reading through it. I love anal you should write more about you and Tawny doing anal or something!

However, you mention jill in at least 1 place, rather than Abby

You changed her name a couple times (careful when you're copy-and-pasting scenes into a story!) and the whole idea of a naughty encounter is that it has to seem wrong in the first place. You just had a teen sex bunny ("niece" my ass!) meeting an older horn dog with an impossibly hot stripper-centerfold for his live-in girlfriend who, naturally happens to also be bisexual and into anal and everything else. You forgot to make the "niece" a secret heiress of an international brewery empire and she's just about to come of age and inherit her dead step-daddy's billions and Lear jet. Actually, you probably did do that, but I can't make it to the very end.

Fantasy is fine too, but not when it just springs into place out of nothing. You need to build your people up a bit before they start grabbing each others junk and spewing love fluids.

Month long trade convention? Do you like my hot body? Try again.