All Comments on 'ABC Modeling Company Pt. 03'

Hi:

i just started reading your story "ABC". its great. I love the tale. and i like the slow build, the tease, the characters. i've just started chapter 2. my handle is Goducks1. Unless you picked up someone recently, you do need someone to review and edit the text for grammar and especially spelling. i'm happy to review your next chapter. i have reviewed stories for this site before. just let me know if you'd like me to read the next chapter before you post. Thanks

Each chapter gets better and better. Looking forward to mare of this tale.

I appreciate the offer. The site is throwing errors when I try to email you my email address. The forth part is done. I will hold off a few days and try later to reach you. Sorry to my readers for making you wait. The final part has my favorite chapter.

i really love this story. i hope you keep it going for a while. Beth, Cindy Anna, Ron, all the Army guys - what a great, fun, VERY sexy read. you're a good story teller!

i just resent you my email address if you want me to read/edit your future stories. hopefully we can connect

Don`t get ,me wrong. I love erotic stories and incest ones are a guilty pleasure. However these stories stand on their own without the incest. You have the makings of a screenplay here and the only actor to play Ron is of course Dwayne Johson

The U.S. Army does not have any 5 star generals. Has not had a 5 star general since the death of General Omar Bradley.

Why would it have taken 16 hours to fly from California to an island in the Caribbean? I'd say you obviously need editing help.

This has been a fun read the few mistakes don’t take away from the main story.

The ONLY 5-Star Generals, None serving in the Middle East

George Marshall, Douglas MacArthur, Dwight Eisenhower, Henry Arnold and Omar Bradley

The OLNY 5-Star Admirals, None serving in the Middle East

William Leahy, Ernest King, Chester Nimitz and William Halsey, Jr.

Issuing The 5-Star Rank was discontinued following the Second World War.

McArthur always referred to himself I the 3 person, such as saying "the general".

Even better than chapter 2. Well done!