All Comments on 'Abigail Slaughter'

Hey, Gauche, let?s see what the word limit is on these PCs. I?m going to presume (hope) you write more (saga?) about these fascinatingly attractive characters. More back story, more exploits, please; esp. a scene between A & V (I love your names). The ?breakfast seascape??a uniquely exquisite ?sex scene??left me metaphorically drooling and damp. Your language makes my mind?s nipples erect: ?twin thrills of illicit secrets? plosive? plainted? little bleeders decked in fluorescence? steam wreathed voice? horrified butterfly hands? shoal of plump tomatoes? crozzled edging? ?; and the last lovely perfect sentence (I felt ?there?). Hoping to find a ?full English?, Perdita

Echoing the PCs that you are getting on this submission, I'd like more please. When I was reading this, I so wanted it to be a novel so that I could savour it for 2-3 days at least. Do write more on it.

I knew there was a very good reason for liking food. This is definitely a gourmet piece of writing.

I'm still licking my lips.

This is so, it feels very much like a beginning; the introduction to a team who can take us places.

Carl reminds me lots of a friend from years ago.*fond smile* Do tell us more.

I like the Arundhati Roy-esque 'Hardsoft' textures and the lyric quality of the sentences.

Abigail's journey to work was my own this morning. *grr* to all "Mummies"!

The descriptions and character build up was brilliant!!!!!!

Great story, love to see this one become a novel ;-)

Ok, as soon as I've written this I'm off to the transport cafe down the road. ;)

I completely agree with what others have said, this story does feel like the opening chapter to a novel - or, at least, I can only hope it will be.

You have some wonderful characters here and I'd love to see you develop them even more. Yep, I think you could have a lot of fun with this one, there's definitely a lot of milage in it.

Loulou

xxx