by StacattoandWish
I can't believe how good this story is. I am looking forward to more of Adam and Amber's adventures.
Certainly one of the better ones here. Please continue. I want to know what other items are in the bottom drawer. And with the isolation where they live, how about some outdoor sessions, too? You two have the ability to really expand on this storyline. Keep up the great work!!!
Thank you for such a fantastic story. Some of the things you brought up caused my mind to drift back to things in my own life. I've been there.
Your story is touching, erotic, compelling and I hope to see more of your characters and their experiences in their journey.
I had never imagined an S&M relationship could be like that... but this story is an absolute masterpiece. I honestly don't think this is the best eroctic story I've ever read! Thank you for writing this.
I was engrossed while reading Adam and Amber's stories. It was extremely well written and I loved looking into the minds of both characters. Thank you, and please continue with another chapter.
Please continue, this story had me one edge from chapter 1. The story is written well and needs to continue Sir!
So when is chapter 3 cumming out? Amber's lassons have only just begun!
Like the other commdntators, I loved it. It was very well written but could use a little more editing.
Can't wait for the next chapters. Keep up the good work.
I thoroughly enjoyed your stories, despite the fact that they were both train wrecks mechanically. You have demonstrated that you badly need the services of skilled, literate editor. Any such partner would very likely caught many, if not all of the numerous errors contained in your work, such as:
back yard (backyard)
Ambers (Amber’s) (2)
I sat the bags (-down) (set down)
septic (tank)
called a plumber and (-they) (he/she) would (WHO ARE THEY????)
hick-up (hiccup)
every time you (have a) need (2)
READING the stories I was READING. But I found that I missed them ... I liked READING (16 WORDS READING X 3)
what ever (whatever)
loose control (lose)
stared at her calf (started)
closest to me (closer)
He bottom (Her)
defiantly getting (definitely)
tear filled (tear-filled)
He (he)
sooth (soothe)
more than she could bare (bear)
instructed her (to) stand
wanted me (wanting)
soft cries emitted from inside of her (AS OPPOSED TO EMITTING FROM OUTSIDE HER, OR FROM HIM EVEN????)
life time I had know many woman (lifetime) (women)
spread eagle (spread-eagled)
plunge and pull the dildo (in and) out
staring to slow (starting)
as he carrying her (carried)
warmth of his arms around her as he carried her were now missing (was)
sir (Sir)
every thing (everything) (2)
Amber needing more (needed)
lay on her stomach (lie)
with in (within)
the view (-that) he must now be (-viewing) having
raised (-up) cheeks
laying here (lying) (2)
had her tied up (YOU DON’T TIE SOMEONE UP WITH HANDCUFFS!!!!)
ever time (every)
sighing in frustration (sigh)
dream land (dreamland)
her self (herself) (2)
new found (newfound) (2)
was (-not) his salve (slave)