All Comments on 'Admission of Guilt'

wow, just wow. while im glad he went threw a 12 step program and really turned his life around, im still a little hesitant about the two of them getting back together. i mean, i suppose i can understand how hard a life he had, but he still raped her and caused her family to abandon her. yea, i guess even after all that, they loved each other, but... at least she knocked him out that one time. also, i cant wait till you come out with the next chapter of oddball. till next time.

Loved it. Very well written. Thank you.

Character development was good, given the complexity of the hero and heroine and the limited space in a short story.

I liked it.

Thanks.

Rich

Your story was gritty, harsh and a bit hard to take at the beginning. It was also, however, outstandingly good.

Thank you

It is just an amazing story. I don't know what they saw in each other, and it gives a lot of food for thought on the topic of forgiveness. Personally I have mixed feelings. I think he got off lightly; she had surprisingly many good feelings for him. (It's also surprising how quick she forgives her parents - who were supposed to be her rock!) I guess she was all alone in the world and with a daughter, with a crappy paying job, so she couldn't really do much about it, and she probably was raised up to be nice so she's quicker to feel guilty about punching him and quick to forgive him. I would still fear the time if and when he takes drugs again and hurts her. I really understood how she felt when she put the knife under her sofa for when he visited her house. She doesn't even know that he's killed 2 people! Admittedly, 1 was in self-defence, but killing a person, especially the second one in cold-blooded murder, changes a man. Add to the fact that he's a rapist... it's just hard to see him changing without some severe emotional crisis or something or other. I can't see him having had that. But.. if you overlook that, you can just assume he's changed through Adonis's help. It was in the end a gratifying story!

This story had a lot of angst but that just made it more realisitic. Them naming their daughter after his stripper/junkie first wife is a bit of a stretch though. And well can't really forget that he killed a man, no matter how much that guy may have deserved it.

But overall a good story.

You think living through Hurricane Katrina may just the pivotal emotional crises that he required?

He rapes her and knocks her up etc, and then she not only takes him back but marries him!

This isn't a romance it's a horror story. It this kind of shit that rapists stick their twisted heads to justify their raping women because in the end the women will love them for attacking them

So this was about a 9 out of 10 for being delusional and offensive.

Meth head rapes a girl, knocks her up, but hey it's ok in the end because she really loves him for doing it. Oh, btw the hero of the story isn't just a rapist, but he has killed two men, one premeditated.

Are you yourself on drugs? Cause something has fuckedup your sense of right and wrong.

The hero doesn't deserve a happy ending, he deserves the freaking death penalty.

different times/characters/places - too much skipping around

This was really hard to read because of the way it jumped around. I wouldn't want to spending the extra time it took to try to figure it out ever again. But, that's not the biggest problem.

The jumping around made it impossible to see even the remotest possibility of making him not detestable. If you organized it better it might be possible convince us he he turned out alright. I surmise from your comment at the beginning that you like to mix things up. It is not effective. It drains momentum. You convinced me he was slime. You never convinced me otherwise.

and<<<<<< and ----------- . It would have been difficult without that.

Yes, he killed 2 men, so do many members of the military, does that mean none of them can ever be trusted? Bad things happen, maybe this story will keep some kid off drugs? Some one off alcohol?

I liked it...

Idk why they (previous commenters) are upset...

I mean... He was on drugs...

Chill out...

If you really didn't like the story, you wouldn't have finished... You would have stopped on the first page... -_-

I am not quite as sympathetic to Grant as some but much more so than others ROFL.

He was slime no excuses - but he gets that - he seems to be truly motivated to reform and put his money where his mouth is - OK give him his chance.

As portrayed he is straightening out his life and looks to be making all the effort one might want to earn his second chance - if she can take the risk the readers need to chill "just a bit". LOL

Nicely thought out - and executed - you do need a context editor to fix grammatical and usage errors where they are not intentional. That is true for so many writers here and elsewhere - the spell checkers work but thru, threw, through are all spelled correctly but used differently -

Very intoxicating read. It's earthy and dark, and yet, surprisingly hopeful. The actions of alcoholics and drug addicts, while under the influence, is no less their responsibility than those who are stone cold sober. However, those who manage to turn their lives around should be commended on doing so. It isn't easy, and as clean and sober as they might get, their weakness continually hangs over their heads.

That he raped the girl, Kaylee, and apparently, she wasn't the first, as the story mentions Grant making amends to more than one woman, while under the influence, isn't right. But, in his attempt in becoming a better person, he is owning up to his miscreant ways of the past, trying to set things right (if such can be possible). How many of us would have the courage to face those we've grievously wronged, to apologize, and to ask for forgiveness?

The outcome of the story, although not readily accepted by some readers, does fit the essence of the story, although I think the author probably was waffling there as to using another ending.

I truly enjoyed this story, even if at times, it was difficult to determine where the past and present divided.

Thank you for sharing.

6 years she fears him to a nearly patalogical extent and overcomes it in a few days because he says sorry. She trusts him even though addicts go through multiple relapses and trusts her children around him. Both these people need to be locked up him for murder / rape her for child endangerment. Truly hateable characters

Kaylee what are her motivating factors why did she go from abject terror of this man to acceptance to romance, we have no idea what she's thinking and it seems she basically marries her rapist (does she like rape no she was scared of him so...). How does she trust that he wont go back to meth and Rape her and Her child, does she even consider this? He had a hard life boo hoo, this justifies him raping, so if a guy is on meth and rapes your wife / child, it's ok as long as he's in 12 step?

sorry can't get behind this story.

Just about the time I decide the whole human race should just fuck off and die, I have to read this. Thank you. A little disjointed and scattered (I think that's probably redundant) but it meant a lot to me. Again, thanks. Maybe there's hope.

Oh, by the way, fuck all the negative comments from the resident (so called) experts.

awww, love your hea's!!!

Even on the re-read I like it -

Addicts live disjointed lives - the story works -

Recovery works too - for many not all - see Terri lol

She did not just forget anything - right up to the wedding night she dealt very directly with issues and I bet for sometime to come as well - but she was an essentially good person and ever the romantic so she was fair game - both times -

Good sotry thank you - again

That was quite amazing.

Very difficult to do - to even consider the redemption of a rapist being possible - for most people.

Especially if saying 'this guy could get a second chance' is like saying your own rapist could. Or even a hypothetical future rapist. That would make it even harder to agree or relate to the idea of forgiving him, I think.

Even now, I don't think the guy even believes that he deserved a second chance himself, but he got it and there you go. No one is saying it's right or wrong. It just is.

I try not to be biased, but it's not easy: I think of how it would affect me, how I couldn't imagine forgiving the guy, and it just makes it that much more amazing to me that she could forgive. I mean, I try not to judge, only to understand that it's her choice, even though I can't understand or relate.

Forgiving is not forgetting, so it will still never be easy. He's still the guy that did that to her, and you did a good job of showing that she will never forget.

BUT new memories are the best we can do to help ease the hurting.

It's all we've got.

The drug dealer had it coming, so no problem there. Maybe Grant did too, but he survived, twice - and the Christian elements were handled well and not overdone and annoying as they sometimes can get. Sometimes things are more effective with a small amount of subtlety, anyway.

This is something I'd love to see on amazon/kindle. Better than a lot of stuff on their nowadays.

Wow....this is probably the best written story in this site. It was a bit confusing in the beginning. I persevere and was rewarded by first class writing and characterisation. My theory is you are not an amateur writer!

and real. Of course we all want the happy ending, which was nice but she was maybe a little too quick to forgive. Otherwise, well done.

I have seen AA and the 12 Step Program perform near miracles and I really appreciate how it has helped a few friends and relatives. It is not perfect and does not always succeed but I am certainly grateful for those that it has helped. Luckily alcohol and drugs have not been my failing but I have had others to take their place. Thank you, author and thank you AA for all those who have been helped by your work, both of you.

I had to stop before I finished Chapter 2.

Bloody soaking wet. My eyes,of course .What did ya think? lol.

Innumerable chances,that's what life is. Thanks.

The 5th star.

a girl marrying her rapist..... only you jim bob lol

A wonderful story. The 12 Steps are awesome indeed, as they guide a good man to sobriety and bring him to the woman he had wronged so badly. Terrific.

The Lit app version of this story is truncated.

The first section is missing, and then everything from the middle of p4 of the web version.

Top Shelf story! You did well JimBob44!! Thanks for sharing this Fantastic story with us! ★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!

That says it all. I'd tell you I teared up a few times but I don't want you to call me a sissy. 5 stars. Thanks for writing. JPR

what this story shows... She is a complete idiot...typical woman???

never made amends. multiple rapist and murderer. he should just die.

Read this story over and over. Just like most of your work it’s great. Thank you for sharing

The best story I've ever read from JimBob44. Ok, I like this author. Guilty as charged, but this is something special. Great story telling from a master wordsmith. *****

This story had me ranging from laughing to shedding tears in the span of paragraphs. An absolutely amazing tale, thank you!

It's a lovely story. People finding themselves, and finding each other.

Good story, nice plot, just a little convoluted for my taste, but still worth 4 stars..

Could,(and should), have been 5 stars but for the totally abysmal spelling mistakes.

Please PLEASE get a proof reader, a spell checker just does not cut it .

A proof reader will spot the difference between there-their-they're, here-hear, etc.

They are all words, spelt correctly, so a spell checker just ignores these mistakes.

I know I'm being picky, but it does detract from what could be a really great story...

"The judge agreed and Grant Johnson walked out of the courtroom, a free man, nearly three years after the murder of KayAnn Bernice McDonald Johnson."

How could he ever spend three years in jail before the case was finished?

Three months would make much more sense.

Unless there were an insane amount of courtroom drama as well as prolonged back and forth, which there weren't

Bluberrymaiden said most of what I think about this story.

There are certain singers that have got "it." Sometimes "it" is undefinable, but it makes me want to listen. When the song is over, I say WOW.

JimBob's writing has "it". A quality that pulls me in and makes me want to read. WOW.

Unhesitatingly, 5 stars.

Paul in Oklahoma

...on Literotica at portraying the underbelly of society -- drug users (Grant, et.al.), crippling poverty (eg. Kaylee), moneyed high society with aberrations (Jesse) or dysfunctions (Margaret), and apparently normal, average people seemingly getting along but behind the facade are not that good together (overbearing Tommy and doormat Cathy).

As I read it this time, I thought how smart the author must be to observe so much of the gamut of society with its wide range of character types. Then how talented to portray to us his observations in such a compelling fashion that I get all involved in the story and it's people.

The unproven, overused cliche "once a cheater, always a cheater" basically is saying that people do not change. In JimBob's Louisiana world bad people get better (Grant, Margaret, Tommy), Some bad or problematic people do not change (the drug dealers -- Baby and cohort; Terri). Some do not get the chance (KayAnn). And misfortune strikes decent people (Kaylee's rape and pregnancy; Sandy's cancer). Grant's desire and actions to change into a better person had a ripple effect that made the JimBob world at the end of this tale, brighter than at the beginning.

JimBob44 smashed it over the fence again.

Paul in Oklahoma

Wasnt anything on the last 3 pages stopped with adonis in shelter. But have to say ur other readers r correct this story was so hard to read the way u jumped around back forth

Wasn't it? So sweet the way the junkie that brutally raped the innocent virgin teenager, then abandoned her, left her pregnant, disowned by her family and destitute, suffering horrific nightmares and living in constant fear, the way that junkie that murdered 2 people and got his first wife killed, just waltzed back into her life like a stalker. Wasn't it wonderful that he just marched in and demanded forgiveness because he needed to ease his conscience.

Yep, it's not insulting in any way to rape victims to write about a victim holding a candle all those years for her rapist. I'm sure rape victims all over the world marry their murderous rapists and live happily ever after..... Now excuse me while I go throw up.

My assessment of this story is identical to the statement by anonymous just below my comment (beginning "So romantic").

I would like to add: If that rapist wanted to make up, why then didn't he scrape together all the money he possibly could, to pay child support in arrears and pain and suffering money for the past six years. Afterwards he would have started current payments of child support. Instead he magnanimously pays 100 $ per week for a couple of weeks, so his child and it's mother maintain being almost dirt poor. This leaves him in a position to play the role of the oh so generous Santa/ daddy and to buy the love and affection of mother and child. Basically he acts as an asshole of a different kind to get what he wants, Some romance!

Interesting story but it does requires a "suspension of disbelief" at a few places, one when he so casually kills the man that wronged him and one so huge that I find it difficult to accept, even in the interest of the story, when the woman that he raped falls in love with him.

Don't want to see a rapist and coldblooded killer get a happy ending.

Kaylee deserved far better than ending up with him.

Super nice this what exactly all need crack head rapist and murderers violence wow how romantic leave people dead and traumatized in their wake and then they are sorry but really not sorry dip their pricks in other addicts knowing how capable they are of making right decisions but it's their fault she is ugly but it's ok to fuck her nice. Even the sponsor seems chip of the old block

You triggered a few people with this one. I have it a 5 for story and plot line, another 5 for character development.

Forgiveness is the cornerstone of Christian teaching, I wish some folks could remember that.

Chimo1961

Who is Shelley now, right at the end!!

What an unusual story. Glad it worked out for Grant and Kaylee

Good job, thanks for sharing your work!

The story is very

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Many great things could be said

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You need to on meth to read this story

without >>> & ----- & <<<< it would have been unreadable so thanks for a good read

I do not get it. The simple joy after a rough start in life is the foundation of all good (feeling) stories. I read comments on this category and wonder what these members are thinking when they read the romance tag. Finally, your ability to build a story and characters is way up there on this site. Thanks for sharing...

Great job. The <<<< and >>>> helped quite a bit. But even without that your stories are good enough that I don't mind at all going back and re-reading a page or two here and there to completely get what's happening.

I liked but I have doubts. Forgiving rape? Don’t know about that. Anyway good story thanks..

Sorry but I gave up half way through. None of the characters were likeable. Most were folks you would never want to have into your life.

Wow. I have to agree with JLRemora, Blueberrymaiden, and Paul in Oklahoma (especially his last comment of four years ago). Incredible story! 👏🏻