All Comments on 'Adventure at the Waterslide'

not to mention one of my favorite fantasies. Well crafted and clever. Glad to see you writing again. More stories, please.

wonderful job. You should be proud of this one. Submit it to the "Coming Together book, seriously. PM me for a link or two. I can't say it's a perfect thing, this story, but it's head and shoulders above the general run, and more people should read it.

Loved the easy sexuality among the characters and your writing style is very entertaining and attention-holding! Gonna add you to my thread on Womens' Erotic Literature Fav Authors!

Glynndah:

I was drawn to the story by your post in the Shameless thread - and I'm glad that I read it. Very well done, simple and natural.

Thanks.

I thought it was great. Not perfect but great anyway. Reminded me of my teen years in the 70's my early twenties in the eighties. It was all about sex drugs and rock and roll. Loved those "special" brownies then. Well done for a first. Good dialogue too, my personal unicorn of all things.

MJL

Just a flash and a kiss for a teen twerp! A bit soggy at the end, given the great build-up! Why didn't the whole world see this, with all the deliciously humiliating and wickedly erotic implications!

I love this story! It tickles so many voyeuristic fantasies of mine, I can barely walk straight. This story has it all - public digitalizing, personal gardening, sapphic shenanigans, kitten smuggling and sliding wet on wet action!

Pull the shades and read this one twice. Just don't expect it to cool you off on a hot summers day.

Another wonderful story. I need to go out to the waterslides more!

I once saw a girl at Wet n Wild lose her top. That was embarrassing for her

I loved this story. It fired me right up.

she made her half-naked display before everyone in her group. Isn't that what exhibitionism is all about? Half-naked with the teenager at the bottom of the water slide was, well, okay...and undoubtedly made his day, but why not be a legend among her peers?

What if Lady Godiva got naked only for some teenage kid? Ho hum. We'd never have heard about it. But when she was naked for the entire town--that's news, and it's been handed down through the ages.

Well, I really did like the story--written by an author who knows how to create erotic images in my minds-eye.

You have a way of writing which rivals the speed of sound.

Events seem to happen so fast.

Nice one, Glynndah.

HP

Fun to read. You started it off well and created a lively atmosphere between the teenage friends. A bit short for my liking. It felt as if you got distracted or lost motivation, and just wanted to end it quickly.

Also, you got mixed up between Gregg and Steve near the beginning, and Mike turned into Mark halfway through. These problems can be solved by simply proof-reading it before submitting it, just like your English teacher taught you to do at school.