by theredheadboy
I must say I can tell a lot not only about you but where you from ,from this!
Such a great entry! Gives great insight into what I could do
I wouldn't mind more ,part 2 perhaps
It seems you originally wrote this in the first person, and then switched it to the third. That was a wise choice, but you didn't alter the phrasing in every instance - "..Mahlasela knelt over him, supporting herself with one hand, bringing the tip of my cock up to Matti's trembling hole".
Also, it struck me as odd that out of Officer Johannes and Officer Mahlasela, only one of them seems to have a first name - unless 'Mami' is meant to be the latter's name?
Basically, though, this is very good, and I'd love to see a second section.
Thank you for your kind feedback. It was actually always written in this perspective; the error you spotted was just that, and missed during the proofreading. I'm very glad you enjoyed it, and I may return to this story after I finish Miss Emma Part III.
Wow, I wasnt sure at first starting this story but it is one of the best I have read. Great job
I've now read them all... You are now Very high on my Favorite list, and can't wait for your next one.
Good story. Great imagination. Would have given it another star if you didn't switch from third person to first person perspective.
With that said, it did arouse a fantasy of mine to have my wife and another woman dominate me. The only thing better than one strong woman is too strong women.