All Comments on 'After School with Sister'

That was one hot story . Great build up you defiantly have talent . I can't wait for your next story .You get a 6 even if I can only officially give you a 5 .Keep writing and I'll keep reading .

Thanks for sharing.

So much like my sister and me. Our first time was after school one day as well, 10 years ago, and even though we are both married now, we still fuck like animals when ever we can. Keep writing, it's like I'm reliving my youth through your story.

Really enjoyed the writing and the editing was good too.

"and grinded her"...." should be "ground." As in "find" to "found."

Sibling relationships can be wonderful and have a lot of benefits. It builds confidence and takes the pressure off. Must be careful and have right attitude.

I really like this story as both characters are likeable and the story is generally hot. Only thing I didn't like so much about the story is we didn't really get the sisters motivations. I would have preferred more of a build up and more of a subtle approach to the build up than the sister simply reaching into her brothers boxer shorts unexpectedly.

Still in saying that I definitely liked the story.

I couldn't help thinking how cute the sister acted. Typically, sis had it all figured and got what she wanted. It seems women seem to have the game plan and men sort of figure a game is going to be played. Things got a little warm over here and I'm pissed all three of my sisters have at least ten years on me. None of them could make me do anything other than say ewwwww. Thank god for genetic revulsion to say the least. I really liked this story.

RS

Give Tara's brother a bit of hair on that naked chest -- something between his pecs and around his navel for her to stoke lovingly while she blows him, or while she sits on his cock.

it would help to know more in depth information regarding. each character

Love and fuck between a brother and his sister ,with their mutual consent is something extraordinary and beautiful,You must have experienced it to know how great it is.I fucked my elder sister Helena when I was 15 and her 24.Apart me and Helena,all the rest of the family had gone out to a musical concert.We were sitting on the sofa bed looking at a very hot movie.I had a cover on me and I could not prevent myself to play slowly with my already hardened cock,I got more horny thinking that my gorgeous sister was sitting near me with a very sexy short under the cover.I then noted that her cover was moving quickly and it was evident that she was playing with her clitoris.at a certain moment.I could not prevent myself to jack quicker and quicker and I looked at her telling her that the movie was too hot and apologise for jacking and she told me"Christopher,why are you apologising?I am already wet and also playing with my pussy.She uncovered herself and took out two of her fingers and asked me if I wanted to suck them.I was like a mad men.I sniffed and sucked her fingers which were full of her pussy cream.We then frenchkissed,and took off our clothes, .We sucked each other in a 69 position.Oh,it was great,I was eating her pussy and drinking her pussy juices like a nectar.She sucked me as if she wanted to eat my big cock.She then sat on that cock and rode me like a savage horse!!We then fucked in all sort of imaginable positions,She must have cum at least 8 times and me 4 timesWe then continued to fuck nearly everyday during 6 years and then we each got married Since then 20 years have passed and we still love and fuck each other when we have the rare possibilities to do so,

I loved this one! I like the way the brother was reluctant. Got me so wet!

Why would that be a super weird scene, I mean brothers and sisters, at least in my part of the planet, walk around in front of each other at home in their underwear all the time!

Time for the brother to return some oral favors.

I scored three sisters and not one was at all like Tara.

Best I ever got was 'Peeping Tom" through their window.

Nice yarn GratefulDude.

I wish I was the sister

The story line here is a good one, but it's too rushed, and, as one commenter has already pointed out, we don't see very much of Tara's motivation. Even so, it would have worked well if it weren't for all of the technical flaws that a good editor would have picked up.

One of a writer's major goals must be to keep readers from thinking about the words themselves instead of the story. You've haven't done very well at that.

There's too much "swirling"; the past tense of "grind" is "ground"; "overtop" is a verb, not a place; one regales people--not a story; one doesn't "grab onto" a thing, one simply grabs it. And so on.

You might have picked up many of these mistakes yourself, if you had slowed down. When you've written a story, set it aside for a week or two. Then reread it carefully, and see if you've written what you meant--and meant what you wrote. The temptation to publish as quickly as possible is your enemy; treat it that way. And consider finding a good editor.

I wish I could give it five stars, but it's barely worth four.

It's a good story.... I love it.....

Yes, you had some mistakes and you'll learn from this time and the next one will be better. Letting some fresh eyes read the story before you publish it can only help to make it better. There is a list of people on here doing editing and there are probably even more that do editing but don't advertise it. I know because I do some editing.

I gave you five stars because I liked the story, the concept and the way you told it. There are times when I want to give even more stars but you just can't do that on here so I'll tell the author when I read a story like that. With a little editing, this story would have hit that target.

I think this story could be taken a few more chapters but that's your decision......

Her wider than the rest hips shifted and she threw down the white robe behind her. She put her hips on her waist and shifted her hips back to the right. Looking down at me like I was somehow supposed to critique her style. Which I admit was very good.

grinded should be ground

Y'all niqqas nastyy

It's a really good story but as some other pointed out there are some minor flaws that should be fixed. I gave it a 4.

continue this story please. love it

This might be the best line! 😄 "No," I said, "It didn't. Time's up. Leave my poor little guy alone." LOL "Leave my poor little guy alone" YEP, BEST LINE EVER!!!! And another fav line is "It's adorable!" <giggle> So yep BEST LINES EVER!!!!! *pretend "Timber" is playing* (it might be good music during this comment or if you're reading those lines) ik i keep saying this but BEST LINES EVER &nyways adorable! made me laugh 😆 :/ THE TEXT SIZE IS SO SMALL I MIGHT AS WELL TYPE IN CAPS!!

I got so wet while reading this I started fingering and squirted everywhere !!!💦💦

You should make more chapters this is really good

Wow this was great would love to read more

Makes a girl happy. And well written, too. It's good that the characters don't seem too adult for this to be believable.

this is one of the best the way they were was awsome almost like me and my sis except not by mutch.

defiantly in agreement with the hot comments.

Congrats on writing a really nice one. Kind of romantic too as they got along well with each other before the games started, and they just responded to their natural needs and affection as things got hotter and hotter. I really enjoyed this story and hope you will like others similar to it.

Almost anyone can throw words on a page and come up with a piece of erotic drivel about sex between brother and sister...but this stands out head and shoulders above others. Brother and sister actually care about each other. And their feelings for one another grow. This story explores HER curiosity and HER aggressive pursuit to quench that curiosity.I don't know why society acts surprised and offended when a brother and sister explore their love for each other. After all, they've been "playing house" longer than a lot of marriages last. Brothers and sisters discovering they love one another is as natural as breathing.

I am repeat offender to this story. Well Done!

This is a beautiful story, well written and thoughtful, and told in a way that is kind to both brother and sister. The story sequence was absolutely right on, and I really enjoyed the way the sister was restrained enough to taste his cock, but then jack him off, to leave plenty to do on their next session. And even on the second tryst she rode his cock to orgasm, but didn't let him cum in het pussy, which is important at this stage of the story, because we don't yet know if she is on the pill, or in fact if they have any idea of continuing to fuck one another in future, I think you have left dome interesting questions unanswered, which suggests a sequel is in order. Hope you, continue the tale, exploring the depth of the sister's passion for her brother, and continuing on to further test the brother's hesitancy, and possibly also allowing him to explore his mother's strained libido when she becomes interested in how close her two children are becoming, Thanx for the great read, and keep on trucking!

Thank you. This was a great story. Going to bookmark it for later.

Hot damn

I don't even have a sister to dream about

I've read this before & ill read it again, very well done.

last sentence is There was no mess!!!

it's cute little head (its)

holding (-on) (onto) for dear life (-to)

her and my hand (hands)

handy work (handiwork)

grinded (ground)

giggled and touch (touched)

tanktop (tank top )

bare chested (bare-chested)

Her wider than the rest hips (CLUMSY WORDING)

put her (-hips) (hands) on her waist

her regale (me with) our pool story

LOWERING my pants even LOWER

Her hand has grabbing (was)

mind blowing (mind-blowing)

feel each other around each other (AWKWARD)

thrusting up and down with (my) cock

she had an orgasm (-but) (by) the way she

was good and taken care of (CLUMSY WORDING)

ever (with my) hand over her mouth

jerk myself of (off)

sisters hand (sister’s)

Except this times (time)

my cum dripped thumb (dripping)

This was nice, a little flawed but don't worry, it's still impressive.

I would've loved it if u wrote about the blowjob, but never mind about that.

Keep it up! Good luck! 😉👍🏻

Good read To the ppl who nit pick write your own if you are so full of great ideas

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This was a game to her, and I wanted so badly to make her stop, but it just felt soooo good.

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Lol, somehow I doubt he really wanted to make her stop! At most felt embarrassed, but the hormones fix that problem quick ;)

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"I think I need a towel," she said.

"Ok," I whispered.

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...I think you need to lick it all clean sis...;)

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"Ya know.." she said, thinking, "We don't have to, like.. tell anybody or anything."

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Hehehe, that always gets me! Like, who am I going to tell, and why? 'Hey mom, you wouldn't believe what your daughter did to me after school today!' Or your buddy...'You know what? My sis DOES give an awesome blowjob! Who knew?' Lol.

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Something told me that deep down, I'd always wanted that to happened. Tara had probably been thinking the same thing for a while.

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Ummm, well yeah! Prolly since you got your first woodie and realized those lil panties were covering something really good!! ;)

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After dinner I was up in my room on my computer, reading news articles and whatnot. No music on or anything.

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Translation: I was looking at porn.

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Her boobs swirled around and around with each thrust, I grabbed onto one of them with one hand, and with the other I fingered her clit with my thumb. Swirling it around and around her clit while I fucked her pussy harder and harder.

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Thats actually a lot harder to do than it sounds, lol, trying to keep your balance and rhythm going!

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Now kneeling over her belly with my cock in my hand, I started jerking off over her. Aiming my cock up over her head, she grabbed my balls with one hand, and with the other she helped me jerk myself of.

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NoooOoo, dont waste it! Put it back in and fill her up!! :)

...granted, there were tons of word/phrase errors in the thing, but it was still a fun read! I think the only thing that kind of bugged me was the constant laughing. Haha, this and haha that, it got old fast! :)

Thanks for writing!

I had four sisters never had that luck

Loved the story. As commented by others would have benefitted from having a proof reader/editor give it a once over but would love to hear more of this story even without that.... Please keep up the good work :)

My sister and I started fucking after I caught her and her boy friend fucking on her bedroom floor one night and she in turn caught me jacking off thinking about it. We had a great relationship after that.

The first time with my sister was an accident. I thought it was her friend. They had been drinking, so as I was cuming in her, her girlfriend turned o the lights. We got caught by the one I thought I was banging. By morning her girlfriend wanted to watch me fuck her again. I said she's not drunk. I don't think she'll allow me to. Holly held her hands while I climbed between her legs. I stuck it in hard and fast and she started to scream no. Holly told her, you didn't mid him last night. As I leaned over and started kissing her hard. She finally agreed and we did it all morning while holly watched. After that day when we got home from school we would sneak off and have sex.

All the times I caught her after that she would apologize and make it up to me. I miss those days. Q

Why do so many shoot their load on the sister instead of the warm feeling of cumming in their Hot, Wet Pussy?

I feel sooo happy when I fuck my sister; I never feels that kind of lust and love when I fuck my wife. I love my sister and her pussy.

I couldn't finish this story before I was strolling down my own memory lane. My younger sister and I grew up sharing bed and baths when little. Even after our parents stopped making us bathe together we'd still occasionally share out of habit and company. At home, when alone, we'd occasionally share our bodies in innocent exploration, nothing naughty. In school we shared friends and when others would talk about us we'd exchanged information about what others said. We kept no secrets from each other.

When we started dating we eventually found out we were lousy in bed. Since we were both virgins and had only done oral with our love interests we knew it was about our kissing and oral that was being talked about. We talked about it in detail but did our own things to get better. We both knew of other incestuous relationships, among our shared close friends, but we weren't ready to go down that road yet. That changed one summer Saturday when my sister came home from a sleep-over when she eagerly informed me that she HAD to give me a BJ, right now!.

Never to turn down free head I let her. She was terrible but I was glad she was trying - on me. Soon she regularly gave me head. As she got better we added things to work on. Months later taking turns giving oral became normal. Then all of a sudden she stopped our private activities cold without explanation. I figured she had gotten serious. I was right. Three guys she was dating all proposed about the same time. She pick one of them and got married.

Some years later, I was visiting her when an opportunity came to privately ask about our past. It turns out she had lost her virginity that previous first BJ night in a threesome with her friend and her friend's older brother during her sleepover. Wow. She told me that the whole time she had been giving me head, it was to relive that night. Then she met her husband. He was confident, funny and kept things fresh in the bedroom. The stories she next told me blew my mind. Both my sister and her husband are Bi. They've been MUCH more adventuresome AFTER they got married than before. Their stories belong in Literotica and might be here somewhere

I've had a thing going with my older sister sense we were young, i never did blow my wad in her sweet pussy until years later the first time we had sex after I had been away for a while we had awesome sex & i came in her warm wet pussy and it was a great feeling she had wanted me to come in her pussy and I still do blow my wad in her every time now.

... but it really makes me wish I hadn't been an only child. Dammit! Would have loved sharing something like this with a younger sister.

Keep writing these, please!

Awesome story

Would have loved to read a 2nd part...

I thought the part where he pulled his dick out near the end after his sister climaxed was quite unrealistic as an 18 year old man is very unlikely to have that sort of self-control he'd simply blow his load inside her; I think you've been watching too many pornos as guys in general keep their dicks inside when they cum.

More fun if he would have bred her.

Please keep writing. This had good descriptions and was a fun story!

Absolutely fucking orgasmic. More please

You wished you had sex with your sister

Yes, it was all true, but he will sear on a stack of condoms it's fiction.

He loves his sister. He will help her get birth control soon, like a loving brother.

Love does exist.

People maybe do not realise that incest between brothers/sisters and even nephews/aunts have increased. Incest existed since Pharaons' and Roman era.but nowadays, due to openly minded men and women, consensual incest has increased by..miles!I'm not basing myself on all the stories I have read in Literotica.com but I had facts, confessions ,of friends since college time and working period.I had an experience with my sister Ana when she was 17 and me 20.I shall never forget that first time with my sister Ana.Our parents and we their two children went to stay in our seaside bungalow. On the 2 ND night,our parents were invited to dinner by some friends and told us that they would all make a round in a discotheque.So around 7pm,after dinner, Ana and me wanted to view a movie but unfortunately, our movies were on two different channels.We started to fight who will, get the tv/video remote control when suddenly,the left side my sister'top fell down,showing a very medium beautiful boob either long and dark nipped. She started to apologise when I'm still asking myself how I got the courage to bend down and suck her long and hard nipple.I thought she would slap me on the face.but instead she started to moan and put her left hand at the back of my head playing with my hairs..Then,I told her to lay on the sofa and to put her feet upwards.I knelt down and started to kiss her toes,then her calves,then her inwards legs,then I sniffed and kissed her white string which was already wet and putting her string aside I saw one of the most beautiful, big hairy pussy!I plunged my tongue into her pussy while playing with her clitoris.Her pussy was wet like a river and I drank all her cum and some drops of her pee.She was no longer moaning, but screaming! !She asked me"Alan,I need ur beautiful cock inside me!I answered"NO "I need you to suck me in a 69 position and when I sucked her ass hole, she became like a beast,one howling...Thks to the noise made by the waves.after 15 mins of sucking each other's sex,I asked her to kneel on the sofa and I fucked her doggy style during 20 mins,she could no longer control herself and started to tell me the dirtiest words I've heard.it was fantastic! Then after she had cummed several times,I exploded into her pussy, sending 6 jets of cum.after that we relaxed but I saw that she was worried and when I asked her the reason thereof,she told me"Alan I'm a bit afraid, I'm not on the pill!The next day,I bought a lot of condoms and fucked nearly everyday. Fortunately she had her period 10 days later and since then,after being on the pill, we are great lovers but in total secrecy.since 5 years.How long our incestuous relation will last, we don't know!We hope it will be forever.

No way would he pull out just shot his cum deep up inside her unprotected pussy

I know for a fact that if you're with someone and neither of you want or even talked about having a child you ARE going to pull out before you Nut. Personnel experience can back this up, not all stupid kids are stupid kids.

I agree with some of the other comments here. But that is expected...throw a,few,comments out there, some will likely be ones i agree with.

so, if i sign in with my Literotica account, you ... at least most of you...have no idea who I am. I don't always login.what difference is there? Yet some posters set their stories so no anon reviews are allowed. Silly.

As far as this story, there were some problems with the language, and as someone pointed out, a huge load of fluff. I think perhaps more fluff than story.

Why pull out?

This is story land no VD or babies

Just re-read your story - as good the second time as it was the first - keep up the good work.

men are made as prudes in all i read here -jus ruins all

I know it's been a long time after writing this but it has to expanded. Great lead into so much more to come. I like your style. Wright more on this story please.

Yeah, very hot and both siblings really like what they started. Hopefully you'll write more chapters; where they bang each other senseless as she is on the pill and cannot get enough of her brother. Some added details about their bodies would be greta and more big sister experimenting. That she cannot get enough of his cock and cum and he wants to eat her to climax and like up her juicy bit. Hot lovers. Thanks !

This is exactly how my sis and I had our first encounter..... she wanted to see my cock then play with it. She would suck and jack me a lot but was afraid of fucking because she said my penis was way too big, thick and wide! She was always fascinated at how much semen a man could spurt from his aroused penis!

Sisko tuli huoneeseeni. Nussin pillua paljaalla.

If only I'd had a sister like that!

My Cousin's Parents had to leave her with My Family . As My Uncle got a job overseas . I am so thankful that She stayed with Us .

shaved pussy big turn off and not cumming into her pussy 3 stars

So HOT!

Delighted that they are young & adding to their sex experience by having it off together. Presumably there will be another chapter where they bring other youngsters into their circle to enjoy their bodies.

So hot. I would have loved to read about her rubbing her clit on his cock more before diving in. But a great story. Being freshly shaved is the best! Please write more!

Ground, not Grinded

Seriously I think both Brother and Sister should leave and find an apartment or Small House to rent or buy,and they should start making love as often as possible,and have Sister and Brother start dating each other but not tell anybody they are Siblings,it is so obvious those two love each other so much and deserve to be with one another.

Also Sister sure as hell seems eager to give her Brother as much sex as he does for her.Siblings should always be like that.

My cock never went down until I stroked off a huge load of my spunk.

There's something really wholesome about this. A brother and a sister who truly love each other

To a nicely TRIMMED >> NOT SHAVED>> pussy to list.

To me, a shaved cunt is a TURN OFF.

I equate it to a beautiful painting with a nice frame to draw the eyes to the arrowhead pointing to a source of bliss.

If the minimal energy required to cause the flow of her juices is expended, the flavor will be contained within those tresses, to be withdrawn and enjoyed with lips and tongue, at the appropriate time.

The list of positives goes on and on.

I hear some people say {women, as well as men} say they don't like the strays in their mouth >> A MINOR inconvenience..

Enjoyed your story, and Sis wearing little green panties added to the appreciation of their little cuming together.

This line;

"Awww," she continued, "It's poking it's cute little head out!" cracked me up.

This was an awesome story. The furtive love making, while trying to be quiet, for fear of getting caught, added a wonderfully illicit dimension to it.

Thanks for this. 5 stars.

I love stories that build up slowly and believably.

You did a great job.

As for me? I'd love to see their mother find them and join in.

I miss my brother. We used to have so much fun like this.

Lose the "Haha's"

Good story but an editor with any amount of English could've made it much more readable.

Putting a hip on a waist is pretty difficult. Too many wrong words to list.

he should have eaten his sisters pussy

Awesome story. Would love a sequel

good story

As a girl who had no brothers i missed out on this but had a cousin who all the girls in my class thought was hot. We spent a lot of time growing up together and after school went to each others house. I walked into the bathroom one day and carl was naked wanking into the toilet just as he was coming i was a little shocked amused and curious he was so embarrased and started to apologise and i said dont its ok i like watching you do that what made you want to. He said he did it a lot thinking about girls at school and sometimes had to go to the toilets to get rid of his hardons. I said which girls annd he replied most of them and i said is that me too which he stammered yes you too a lot. I kissed him on the cheek and told him if you want i can help you and took his cock and rubbed him feeling it get hard again and him moan i knelt and took him in my mouth and tasted his cum and loved it. He pulled me up and had his hand in my pants as he squeezed my boobs and started to finger my kitty. After a minute or two he whispered i need to fuck so i turned around took my pants off and held onto the sink opening my legs. I watched him in the mirror adjusting his cock and felt him rub it between my kitty and pushed back when he was at my hole to let him know i was ready he sunk it into me and started to fuck me and it felt so good when he was cumming he pulled out and squirted all over my ass. He finished me with his tongue and fingers and his face was a sticky mess with my goo. We fuck every chance we have and i had to go on the pill as it was to risky me getting pregnant.

I still remember the first day I fuck my brother when I was 17 he was 16 I'm now 36 n we still have sex every chance we get my name is jen looking to chat with girls that has experience with incest u can text me at 8457509904 ladies if u dont have experience n would like to text me I can help u out if any guys text me u better already have experience of incest n I dont share photo

I've done many of the same things with my sister. We were still having sex about 5 years ago when we got caught doing it. She was saying that I forced her and she was scared if she didn't do what he told me to do. Our mother said I've been listening to the two of you for the past half hour. You both were enjoying yourselves. I was 30 and she was 35.

One of the best Brother/Sister stories.

I loved the slow build up.

Beautiful family tenderness .

Bold loved each other and respected .

Can’t wait for the next chapter.

Wish she were MY little sister!

A nice little story of first-time sibling sex. Thr sister really played the part of a Youger, little-sis, and it was certainly appropriate that their first intimacies would be confined to oral and han-job sex for them both.

It's stories like this, that are sweet and loving. I and my brother love them so much. Because this is how we have been with one another all our lives. I love him to the end of my life, and beyond. I started at a very young age suckin' his dick. AND I still suck it every night while we watch tv in the evening. His dick is like a pacifier. I love it in my mouth. We're now very close to retiring from our jobs and plan to fuck our way around the world. Keep writing. Especially if they are like this story.

Very good. 👍 You hit the correct notes with the love and affection.

Awesome and hot read

Very well written, what more can I say? I don't know where PapaGolf414 was coming from about" little sister"? Tara in the narrative is 20 and he is 18.