All Comments on 'After the Fact Pt. 01'
by LT56linebacker
- 32 Comments
johntcooksey6 months agoHeartwarming with a side of humor. Well done. I look forward to more in the series. Thanks much.
PrincessNutNut6 months agoShould have got wind that this wouldn't be a normal, Loving Wives tale.
Two important questions to ask:
1) Are you still a Catholic?
2) Is The Pope still defecating in the woods?
My mate is looking over my shoulder and says I should write that now I'm getting older I'm easily confused.
Demosthenes384bc6 months agoI'm confused - What was the overall intent of the story/series? Gloria's part seems like she's simple reminiscing but Jacks is writing in a journal of sorts. Is the whole thing about a "family journal"? Clearly the reveal by Jack's mother should never be written down, so I'm confused... 3.4*
Jensenslover6 months ago(Well, probably most of you will. Some people you just can't please.)
And some people like you, just can't accept that not everyone will like what you write.
"My personal feelings aside, my religion left me no choice but to have the baby. So I was doomed."
Funny how every cheating wife in most stories on this site who gets pregnant by another man has to have the baby as its against their religion to have an abortion but adultery is also a sin in this religion, but they're only picky on SOME of the religion, disregard the rest.
Anonymous6 months agoCute. Couldn't find any reason to make her Puerto Rican except to make a comment about her temper. A comment which could also have been, "after all, I am Irish" or "Italian" or any other ethnic group.
Cumminginsiderher6 months agoI don't get it.
What are we doing with this story and series???
So the mother cheated and Jack might not have been her husband's Bio kid and she told the wife this because, why???
Then Jack talks about a fart while they are out eating in public.
I'm lost as to any tie in or direction/plot for this story.
LT56linebacker6 months agoAuthorI appreciate the comments- ALL of them. If you didn't read the original stories, you don't know. She did cheat but confessed. The baby IS her husband's, and it is Jack. It is also a secret. Only Jack, Mom and Dad, and now Gloria know. I admitted when the story was published I was too cute with my writing and the parentage wasn't clear. SORRY!!
One other thing- this is, as I have said before, the BIG LEAGUES of Literotica. As the song goes, 'If you can make it there, you can make it anywhere.' Again, thanks for reading. I appreciate the compliment, Boss.
The BEAR
Anonymous6 months agoSo, Gloria followed in Mom's footsteps by being a cheating slut and getting knocked up? That would explain the long prayers and the tears at the church while she was pregnant. Interesting...
Anonymous6 months agoSorry LT56, this one fell flat for me. All the crying histrionics and focus on farting just seemed pointless. Typically I love your work. This simply wasn't the best of it.
sbrooks103x6 months ago"followed by a more soul-searing kiss" - Aren't they sitting on opposite sides of the table?
Anonymous6 months agoLiked it. The only problem is that you listened to some of the comments. Keep up the good work.
KRD192546 months agoDamn it Bear.... Anyone that can make me laugh so hard I cry - gets a solid 5*...
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6⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Hooyah, Salutes...
tralan69er6 months agosbrooks103x
"followed by a more soul-searing kiss" - Aren't they sitting on opposite sides of the table? - You must have SKIMMED over the prior sentence, or you simply took it out of text as you often do. It goes as follows. - " Gloria stared at me with humor in her eyes and blew me a kiss."
You can blow a kiss a long ways.
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