All Comments on 'All Good'

A fairly simple storyline. No-one cheated, no misunderstandings. Ok, the husband was ex-army once again (such a lot of them around in Lit). But ....... It was such a pleasant change - a real loving wife. I liked it!

You have a good first person style. Most of the dialogue is good, but you might want to read it over again, to make sure that it sounds right in your head.

and put a nice, new polish on them!

Liked it, but had to groan when she said SEAL... lol those guys should have their own lit category. Thanks for sharing a nice little piece Ahaz, and good luck getting the juices flowing again. I just submitted a flash sorry myself but mostly because the ideas was like an earworm.

Rnebular

Another author who doesn't know the difference between a rant and an entertaining story.

🍩 Doughnut

🏋🏻‍♀️ Super Navy Seal

💩 Poop

Kudos for not making the wife a cheater. Respect for that. This story had a lot to like in it. I enjoyed reading it and will read more from this author.

A couple of things I didn't like. Demerits for the stereotypical black heavy. That was unnecessary and irrelevant. Demerits, also, for the prototypical SEAL hero. Why is everyone a SEAL or some other Special Forces dude or super spy? How many of those can there be? Just in case you didn’t know, those guys aren’t trained much beyond rudimentary hand-to-hand, and most haven’t been in three actual fights in their lives. Most are small guys, used to working as a team, with weapons. They don’t come close to the skills or experience of an MMA fighter, can’t match the power and speed of a college linebacker, let alone a pro, and just aren’t experienced in that sort of thing. If they’re in a hand-to-hand fight, their mission has failed.

We need a new tough guy trope. Oh, yeah, free safeties in the NFL aren’t 6’5. Tone down the macho stuff a bit and you’ve got a good story. Too much swagger, but I’ll give it a four.

I tried to write this in a tongue and cheek style a la HDK or JPB . Apparently I need to improve. In that regard I wanted it to be over the top. I will improve :) this is the type of feedback I enjoy so thank you.

Ahaz

Ahazura,

I got it. Loved the introduction of all the typical tropes, only to have them be shot down by the wife. The only ones you played through 'straight' were the big black third party, and SEAL husband. I suppose that may be why they stood out more?

If he'd assumed the boss was black, or a football player but he wasn't that would be more in keeping with the rest of raise a trope only to flip it elements. Similarly the husband was in the military but utterly useless without a gun or if he isn't managing an artillery piece or in a tank or something meaningless for civilian tough guy stuff.

Beating up some other guy that is of course way bigger and stronger. It just makes the stuff unreadable.

Always has good things to say about other authors, always writes an entertaining story, writes to entertain and not push some agenda or other. This was entertaining, as well. I think an intro, mentioning that you were going over the top for effect would increase your chances of not being taken so seriously. Just a fun little romp. Thanks.

Good short.

Liked him worrying about all the clichés that were happening but with an upright and faithful woman.

Thanks.

Oh, your story is imperfect, and contrived, and over the top, so you failed? So you self-anointed judges of writing perfection prefer story after story of Martian slut wives and sissy husbands cumming in their silk panties while watching their "wife" take cock from anyone other than their husband? Fuck you!

This story was fun, and refreshing, and a relief from the humiliation and cruelty and betrayal that is somehow rewarded as asserting a woman's control over her body and a man denutting himself in an effort to be sensitive and conciliatory and understanding. Bull shit!

Sexual predators are animals, and animals are repelled by only two stimuli, fear, and pain. They think entirely in terms of hammer or nail, and if you let them think you might be a nail, they will welcome the opportunity to be the hammer. Fuck that. There's a reason large experienced bullies are very wary of smaller feisty opponents. Little guys don't fight fair, and they don't hold back. Two jocks might have a refreshing manly fist fight. Little guy will take his beating, then put a 3/4 inch piece of rebar to the back of your head the first time he gets the opportunity. Cowardly? Yeah, and sweet. The grave yards are full of "brave" men who are 6'5" and weigh 250 pounds, and used to taking whatever they want from whoever is smaller, until someone finally has had enough. Read the story of Ken McElroy's end; funny as shit. That's justice.

Liked your story. Thanks for the fun read. More.

You skipped a lot of the cheating wife clichés but the ex-Navy Seal husband and the over-the-top boss are still regulars. The humor makes the story. LW stories rarely supply laughs all the way through.

Tongue-in-cheek or not, it's great to read about a loving, faithful couple who take on the world together and win.

Five Stars

Nice job of dancing across a crumbling bridge. You had us all set up.

In contrast to some of your other stories, this is pretty much high school level.

# 5 Short and well written

seemed to me to be tongue in cheek and i enjoyed it. thanks 5*

Thanks Ahazura. Finally a loving wife who is loving and smart enough to actually confide her problems to her husband. I understand the violence but, probably, reporting the guy to HR would have been sufficient as a first step ... although the story might not have been as short in that case.

5 stars

A funny story, that have it all: clichés, twists and even a Navy Seal husband...A very good read...4*

I like the notion of a husband constantly faced with obvious and clear signs that his wife is cheating, only to find an alternative explanation that preserves her faithfulness. Of course, the surprise ending is her actually being unfaithful, in the most unobvious way. Thanks for the offering.

You had me laughing from the get go, with all the tropes snuggled up in a tight little flash.

5/5 for the laughs

OK, the cliché with Navy Seal, etc. is a bit overdone. But the faithful wife was nice and the asshole boss gets his due. Thanks, keep writing because I liked your other stories and this one was fun.

Thanks for sharing.

Nice use of cliches to spin a positive story. Short, sweet, and righteous violence, followed by happiness and babies.

Thank you for a good time

All good fun twisting the cliches.

Finally a story about how things should be. Nice tale.

I won't go so far as to class this as drivel but you're very close. I expected better from you.

More endings like this story are needed on here and in real life.

Rarely has a title fit a story more.

A wonderful twist on old tales, and done with tongue firmly in cheek.

You suckered me in with coming home early and a strange car across the street. Then the sounds upstairs. I took it hook, line, and sinker. You? You kept feeding me line, teasing me. Amazing in such a short story.

Well done.

Thanks,

Orb

All good!

.... ends up collecting food stamps .... no surprise here! Now the CUCKYBOYS & three hole, cum dump slut women who infest this site now have to find another story to satisfy there pathetic lives.

Well done Ahazura!

Seems the best writers are coming back. And with twists. Loved it. Thanks.

Her boss better not fuck 'cause hubby was NO cuck!

Always heartwarming to read about a slippery snake of a boss who gets the shit beat out of him by a husband who was a Navy Seal,or a Green Beret,or Special Forces,etc.!

I liked this story. Wow, a real loving couple who had each others back. And best of all 'no cheating'. You sure pulled me in with this and then twisted it around. Good Job. Thanks for the entertaining and different story.

Great job on this short story! Can't wait for you to finish ypir other stories though!

Most of the authors in loving wives category are misogynistic pics, who portray women as cum loving sluts or dumb broads that would fuck up their marriage at the first chance they get. Don't get me started on the BTB category , the stories are so out of reality, they make me seriously question the sanity of all those basement living authors. Nice to see a good story

that's what its all about, Hokey Pokey. TK U MLJ LV NV

What kinda trash is there on the internet these day?!!

One of the best stories on the site.

problem with her boss, coworker, whatever. Trying to handle it herself is good and when it gets too bad telling hubby is good because even if he is not a navy seal or what not he should know what's happening in his marriage and in the life of his wife. Hard to explain when the shit goes down why hubby didn't know something was going on. Hard to explain after wife is raped that it could have been out in the open and hubby does have a right to know what's going on with his wife.

I like the story and for the poster who said it was like high school drama, well guess what, sometimes adult life is just like high school in the work place. He didn't need to be a Seal, he could have just been someone who didn't take shit off of anyone. He did need to be someone who was used to physical confrontation, takes a different type of aggressive behavior to fight an adult, but the knife and the board in the alley can do the trick. It that adjustment to his attitude didn't take there is always a weapons escalation. Thanks for the good read and for making the wife not so stupid or vain and the husband not so indecisive. Real people come in all flavors.

"That is when my wife found out what I did in the Navy."He should have added: "She was speechless when she learned I was a finance clerk, and could take down an enemy with a stack of spread sheets as a weapon".

The Iraqi resistance against US occupation ended because in our protaginist's four years in the desert, he wiped out the entire Iraqi resistance, single handedly. Those who were in the cities? Why he lured all several thousand, into the desert, where he took them down. Single handedly.

What a crock of shit! Two stars.

The Navy Seal thing is over done, but it's still fun to read.

I thought the husband was going to kick him the balls but he didn't better still the wife with her complaint got him fired.

Geez...where all you writers picked on in primary school? You write that every husband is superman and before meeting his wife he has fucked a thousand different women giving each and everyone of them a thousand orgasms!!! Get real!! As soon as Mr. Incredible showed up in the story it became utter shit! It seems like most of the writers on this site just have to have husbands who can kick the shit out of anyone at anytime...why don't you get the women to kick the shit out of their antagonist's....at least it would be humorous then!

Great story. Four out of five. I love how all the usual tropes are turned around.

Sure the Navy SEAL thing is a bit overdone.

But I still enjoyed it.

Steve

"I wasn't sure if he was just a naturally touchy feely guy" - Um, don't the inappropriate remarks rule that out?

Maybe a little over the top maybe not. I live in a small town and could name half a dozen locals, most not seals, but seals aren't the only bad asses out there. Just saying true life can be stranger than fiction any day. And look up true friend quotes about dealing with bodies, where there's smoke ya know?

You really did hit damn near every LW cliche in the book -- with delightfully dry humor.

Thoroughly enjoyable, thanks!

The asshole got what he deserved...

no wimpy cuck here, for sure!

I liked the different twist.

It was definitely different. I only wish you had not made him an ex-SEAL. Just about any returning military combat veteran would have been able to take him down in the same way.

5 stars.

I assumed the Boss was black because he was an EX NFL free safety. Don't leave much room for a white guy. I asumed Ahaz was just saying that subliminally.

Hey anonymous, you should have read the rest of the paragraph. There was nothing subliminal about it, " He was the only black manager in the company and came with the requisite jock attitude.".

A couple in love encounter a problem, talk it over, and deal with it.

All Good

Thanks

That is how you deal with an arrogant bastard who thinks they can use their position at a firm as leverage to get into a wife's pants. Don't try this shit with the boys in uniform! You WILL be sorry! 5-stars for a different type of a lovely story!

I enjoy an OTT revenge story from time to time

Love that it was a hea! Good job!

another super seal......arf-arf.....

I love the witty play on the usual coming home early tropes. I find I enjoyed it much more than the others. Awesome.

A true LOVING WIFE is still alive on this site. A wife that want and need only her husband is a thing of the past. What a shame how other stories on this site don't believe in that anymore. BLESS THIS WIFE TRUE LOVE FOR HER HUSBAND.

Good story about a real loving wife, who confided in her husband before things got out of hand. That strange car had me concerned for a minute. Good touch with the vibrator too. Bonus to see the diversity hire, who thought he was the man, go down very hard.

yarn. Thanks.

Good story It's good to see that some wives are loyal and do what's right you don't see that a lot on this sight I know it's LW category where a lot of cheating goes on this was a refreshing story. Give it a 5

Cheers

You touched almost all the bases in this one! Thanks!

all they'd have to do is COMMUNICATE their feelings with us...like she did in this story. women ironically spout this shit all the time at men and they NEVER seem to do it. double standards much?

i mean, she could be a 5 outta 10, this bumps up a woman to a 9. honesty is just that rare.

...but sweet! Now this is what a man's reaction is towards a predator. So he thought he was big and tough and could have his way with a married woman and walk all over the husband, showing him no respect?! " Spank her pretty ass?!" - how dare the low life bastard disrespect the couple like this! Got what he deserved, in spades! 5*s.

To the office predator should be like that. She wasn't perfect, just in love with her husband and it motivated her to act out appropriately

a perfect world

they say that violence does not solve the problems, but in some cases it helps a lot.

So I agree to use it when no other option is on the table.

A little street justice goes a long way.

No writer worth his/her salt doersn't have a good Navy SEAL story or two. Never portray them as wimps, as some writers have, you may find yourself dead in a crack house!

Story ended with me chuckling.

Comments got me outright laughing.

Orblover recognized he was the fish that got hooked -- but loved it.

Good on you.

Been too long since I read a Navy Seal story. Thanks for the fix.

Paul in Oklahoma

What's better than btb on cheating wife? Most things. But faithful wife with idiot wannabe suitor boss getting his nuts creamed fits the bill.

Another good story to read again. Used the strange car , and the honey we need to talk, and.still managed a happy ending. Good one.

And the baby’s colour was suspiciously dark.

So many cliches debunked where worry leads to a truly loving wife. And, a shit head gets what he deserves. It has everything!

As an ex- Air Force spec ops weinie, I'm glad to see our friends in the squids got a work out. It 's so nice to have a story where the good guy takes care of business.

Death From Above

An all positive story. No sleazy wife buckling in to her boss and Mr pervert boss getting what he deserves.

Great read, refreshing and finally a woman who truly lived up to her vows.

...the kick to the knee, best target, easy to hit, impossible to stop, always painful....I learned that on attending self defence classes. It drops every dickhead you might meet, even the big ones.

York is so right about the knees .. My teacher at the Dojo made Me wear padding so that the ladies could practice their moves .. My Knees and Balls still hurt thinking about that day .. The Other Guys Busted My Chops for about a week .. OK So I Lied They still call Me KB ..

Loved it - Thanks for a good laugh and uplift story!

Enjoyed

Reading again. I’m still amazed at how many LW cliches you were able to fit into such a short story.

26thNC says it all below, a 5* shorty that gave me a big grin.

Agree with 26th and B/K completely

#MeToo versus BLM is the conflict, Navy Seal is the resolution.

Thanks for a fun shortie which is jam packed with LW cliches.

Keep 'em comin'.

So nice to read a actual loving wife story! With a deal man I might add

Feel Good stories. This was one. Thanks

Now that’s the way you handle a dick that comes on to your old lady ! The fact she come clean with her husband says a great much about her character. What a wonderful wife and excellent husband this couple make ! Well written , and at least for me , a very likable story !

Good one. Well done. Thanks for sharing

4 stars and no comment

sometimes you just need the "feel goods" like this one.

A man's gotta do what a man's gotta do.

That is the way to deal with arseholes.

Don't like the short stories. Give me some depth of the people involved.