All Comments on 'Alpha Killer Ch. 06-10'

As always with you Partwolf, you weave a story that captures the imagination and won't let you go. Can't wait for the next installment.

This is really, really good writing. Drama, tension, mystery, bloodshed, it's all there.

Fantastic and gripping tale. I can always rely on partwolf for a great read. Thank you for your stories

If I could give more stars I would, amazing story teller cant wait for the next chapter.

Its tense, its gripping. This story has me total hooked......keep writing PLEASE

Damn! Once again, you have me on edge and anxious to see what's around the next turn. I enjoy your stories and this one is no different. Please, please post the next installment soon!!

As usual, superb writing PW.

Got a challenge for you!

Revive and rewrite this story abandoned on literotica. The story is "Running With Wolves" by BlueWolfDancer4454.

Complicated but interesting!

More often if you prefer on Inkitt.com user Partwolf.

Glad for a chance to read more of your work. Have loved it each time

Ok I skipped straight from first page to write this. This is not how to keep real readers interested. Flash back and forth is terrible and I have feeling we will be going back and forth a lot. Start at the very beginning with the story. You can skip ahead in time to current events. When smaller details need explained you can have short flash backs but you made while first chapters flashbacks and then cut it off to come current time. Means you will be going back again. You writing this more like a movie but it doesn’t work as well for reading because focus is lost when we have to read page after page of flashback. I know you trying to have cliff hangers for a hook but no. That’s fine to use this method once for a hook but to keep doing it is just annoying. I could go on and on. Like I said it’s good story but to keep going back cutting the story off when it’s gets the best is not good way to keep interest.

I be little nasty now. Don’t give a damn about pages of going back in time. Story should have started their. Entire story is out of whack. Misaligned stories are hard to keep focus on. We know she not in pack we know beta took over. It really doesn’t matter if she lost fight or just ran. You give too many details early for flashbacks to be necessary. This chapter only 4 pages and over half is flashback. Flashback should be short and about something we can’t easily deduce, like how she met jarrod.

Damn why are the Alphas such asshats? that is because they are politicians.

Don't take in the nasty comments below. The flashbacks serve a purpose and I'm fully engaged. There are many good books that interweave stories from different timelines into a whole. It is a difficult technique. Yes, there are some spots where more skill could help, but I'm finding it interesting and I want to see what happens next. Takes more courage to put up honest work, with the fruitful seeds of imperfection, than it does to post criticism in a nasty and unhelpful tone.