All Comments on 'Always Home Ch. 04'

YOU REALLY KNOW HOW TO KILL A GOOD STORY

Relationships have cycles of ebb and flow, tension and peace, sturm und drang. And . . . make-up sex can be so hot! Obviously, you're setting the stage for the next installment with Elsa needing to relinquish some control and demonstrate some trust in Gerald. She must become less the controlling older sister and more the partner/companion if the relationship will last.

This is very good writing. Please continue.

i certainly liked it. i hope you keep writing

It's good to find some real emotion in a story, even if it's negative and hurtful. That's how life is, sometimes.

Besides the very beginning when they moved, I was wondering when, if ever, you would introduce Marnie emotionally to the story. A very direct girl with a sharp tongue. I love it!!!

Gerald should have played it cool in the video library. Instead his shouting just made them the centre of attention. His plan for them to be more affectionate in public and in from of Marnie is a good idea though.

On to the main scene. Elsa obviously loves Gerald very much, and coupled with her generally reserved nature, I can only think her going psycho on him (and Marnie to a lesser extent) was due to a bad combination of worry and alcohol, and not because she was trying out a twisted social domination power play.

Great chapter as usual.

His unbaked notion of his and Elsa's relationship being wrong is stupid. If it is so immoral, they wouldn't have continued fucking. As for her idea of moving to a new location, yeah, why not? Does Gerald want to live the rest of his life ashamed and unable to display his feelings for his sister in public?

Now that was unexpected from the Elsa character. Wonder what will happen next. 5/5