by CarolinaPeach
Some how my thanks to my editor got lost. Thank you, curi0us7r4nny, you helped me make this story the best it could be.
Good development from part1. Enjoyed how you dealt with the conflict (and the cell phone). Just looking forward to part 3.
Well done.
You can feel the love these two have for each other. I hope it's going to be the same for me! It was just so sweet and loving... Keep writing this andany other stories you've got in mind! I'll read them!
I had an issue with three paragraphs at the end which were disproportionately large. They came across as "walls of text", making it hard to read. Keep paragraphs shorter to improve the readability.
Other than that, I liked the story. It had a nice flow and some seriously good description of the sex.
I'm sorry about the huge chunks of text. I am in the process of remedying that.
I did get confused. I thought Chuck was awakening Amber so now Cody is. I had a hard time equating Amber's Awakening Ch. 2 with chapter 1. Otherwise I liked the story. Is it the same story thread?
Congratulations on getting it rated as a 'hot' read. You developed this story so well. It was my pleasure to work with you. If you ever write more I would love to read it.
You're a peach, all right. This story is very well done. True to life. I could feel what Amber was feeling, and felt as if she were telling the story to me personally. I found myself thinking Amber must be you.
The female POV is all too rare here on Literotica. Thanks for a very erotic read.
Looking for Chapter 3.