All Comments on 'Andalucia'

Please, find someone to proof your next submission. All in all, the story wasn't bad. But, it was very difficult to read due to poor punctuation, sentence structure and the use of incorrect pronouns. Slow down! Another day or two of review by someone else will do your stories a world of good. And, above all, keep trying!

I agree that more proofreading is a thing that is much needed. Having said that, the story's overall effect is quite good.

Please continue writing.