All Comments on 'Ann & Jim Go Swinging'

I can't wait to see what happens next! I hope Jim gets more of that hot little Jessie!

You need to avoid switching back and forth between past and present tenses. Don't describe, for example, someone's body as it is now (present tense), and then describe how a character ravaged it (past tense).

anxiously awaiting the next meeting of these four horny people

...from one paragraph to another or even, as you do, within the same paragraph. This is a sign of illiteracy at worst, careless at best, but a real turn-off in any case.

Thanks.

Susan in Monterey

Thank you VERY much for writing a story of my deepest desire; to be with my wife, watching her receive and give pleasure with another man, while I'm fucking his wife. Absolutely wonderful and I was imagining that it was me and my wife there, in that HOT interchange. ..Tim

Really enjoyed it and ready for part two

Your story has left me all wet!! Please advise what you plan to do about that baby!!!!

Just more of the nasty trash we expect from licker.