All Comments on 'Apples to Apples'

Your descriptive adjatives lost me in the second sentance. Sounds like something out of a 50's smut novel. You were trying too hard.

Had to stop there, couldn't stand to go on.

Sorry...

This was more group sex than incest, but I persevered and finished it. You will have to continue though afterall his sister just tricked him into impregnating her. So he leaves his girlfriend for his sister and they begin a family together. That's just my opinion.

My writing style isn't for everyone, but I appreciate the feedback. I do tend to use a lot of more stylistic descriptions than simply "slid my dick in and out of her pussy" doesn't have the right ring to it every time for me.

And yes, I suppose it was more group oriented, but since there were two sets of siblings having sex/fooling around in the story I felt that incest was more appropriate. I'll take your suggestion and see what I can do to craft the next part into more of an incest-fest. Thank you.

I luv SLAPPY 101 please continue to write about the family and the brown, red and ebony women in your family and lick and love them all in the name of incest. Apples to Apples "2"

Please SLAPPY 101 our Booty BIGGGGG bRotHER !!!!!! (LOL) OOOOHH don't stooooop!!!!!!!

LA RAS

The scenes with his sister were real hot! You should continue on by focusing on the siblings. It was real hot that his sister tricked him into trying to knock her up! Cant wait to see how he reacts.

It was fun to read!

It will be interesting to see where this all leads!

Thanks for writing!

A very nice good start. The next thing you need to do is have all 4 girls get pregnant by him, and finish the school year with large pregnant tummies. An even better finish would be for the 4 girls to get pregnant by him again many, many times. they should each give birth to at least 13-26 babies each. With them always being barefoot & naked.

Bring back Robin of course and have them have a meeting of the other girls and of course figure out wither it will be pleasant or not and Alice still needs her share among other things.

it was a good story and i hope you continue it but use a good editor and never post a story without going through a good editor first sevberal major goofs like TITHES instead of TITTIES SHOW SOME PRIDE IN YOUR WORK AND RESOECT FOR THE READERS AND ALWAYS FINISH WHAT YOU START AND NEVER POST A STORY WITHOUT GOING THROUGH A GOOD EDITOR FIRST

if you are writing for yourself that is fine BUT DO NOT POST THEM if you are writing for the readers then BE SURE TO ALWAYS FINISH WHAT YOU START AND BE SURE TO ALWAYS USE A GOOD EDITOR BEFORE POSTING. now get busy writing and finish all your stories or delete them all NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I CAN WRITE IN CAPS TOO YOU ARE A COMPLETE ASSHOLE WHO HAS NO IDEA WHAT YOU ARE SAYING. YOU HAVE REGARD OR RESPECT FOR THE REST OF US READERS OR ANY WRITERS. YOUR OPINIONS JUST DON'T MATTER TO ANYONE ANY MORE SO TAKE YOU RELIGIOUS BULLSHIT AND GIVE UP

just reading the ass belows comment you can tell he is a mentally handicapped asshole that should be in a rubber room. the story needs a good editor and a second chapter or a delete. NEVER EVER LEAVE A STORY UNFINISHED AND ALWAYS BLOCK ASSHOLES LIKE PETECO HE RUINS EVERY STORY HE COMMENTS ON.

Hahah great story here! So many of the descriptions and lines of dialogue were so excessively vulgar I couldn't help but burst out in laughter! literally laugh out loud funny stuff here, and a damn hot story/scenario too!

Loved it, well done!

I liked your story. I wish the brother and sister had been exclusive. That is the hottest part of this story and in my opinion should have been the main focus with the others in the back ground. A continuation story with only Julie and would be fantastic as long as it is just them together and no one else. Again thanks for the good story

I JUST CAN'T STOP THINKING ABOUT GERBILS!!!!!!!!

it would have been really good for the author to continue this story but after so much time i don't see this happening