by Scotsman69
good story maybe a bit mor information about the girl would help and it does not rain in Scotland all the time
Well written and very erotic. This is my idea of consentual non-consent. She teased. She knew what she wanted. He gave it to her. Perhaps not in the way she expected. But she will never forget it.
Fun romp in the heather, that was!
I really enjoyed the dialogue...I could hear that lilting Scottish accent the whole way through, very unique and cool. A few choice words I might have replaced, I don't know...I have an unnatural obsession with alliteration, so certain words "stick out" to me, but maybe that is my problem more than yours. I still rate it at 100.
I like your female characters, both in this story and others I've read. They feel lush and three dimensional. You can tell that you love women. I like where you go with the non consent. It's just rough and ready enough without being frightening...made me twinge....kisses. xx
Ya know, I've always had a sweet spot for a guy who has a scottish accent and called me Lass. I loved reading this story and seeing those words in it. I could imagine the guy in a kilt with a scottish accent and how it would make me melt. *sigh*
A fine and very well written story. Your dialogue style, though uncommon, works well and is very easy to read.
I like the way you join words together to form new ones (eg cuntscented, sexgirl). They add a freshness to the writing (until it catches on and everyone starts doing it).
You're honestly a superior writer. Your characterisation is so astoundingly authentic. I am going to list you as one of my favourite authors and begin at the beginning and see if i can work my way through everything that you have here.
I'm honoured that my words have managed to touch you.
I found that you'd commented on stories of mine in the way-back and followed your profile to see what your writing was like. As a big fan of ceilidhs, this one drew my eye...I especially like the stinger at the end ;-)