by K_Finnegan
You did a great job for your first story! Keep up the good work
This was an exceptional story with very believable characters, emotions and motivations. And you went to the trouble, either by living it or researching it, to nail down the little details of what Phoenix was like back then. I really appreciate that kind of care. I hope we see more stories from you.
Well written building the story and the characters slowly, am already looking forward to more of this story hopefully there will be other adventures in the pipeline.
I liked this story and I especially liked the setting in Arizona as it is my hometown. I am very curious to see where the story will take us! Keep it going!!
What a beautiful story. It reminded me of my first time with my friend Kelly. I only wish I had your talent at descibing your feelings and actions in such detail. We hope to read more. Kay
Great Story. The mode change and reversal at the end was so real.
Maybe too detailed to be actual memories, but still it instantly dropped me back into the 80s. Good times. Well maybe not Rush, a band I never really liked. Look forward to the rest.
I love the attention to detail. You're writing about what you know and it shows. If this is not based on actual events, it certainly feels that way. It's something a lot of amateur writers struggle with. I also like your no-nonsense storytelling style. You show no urge to embellish like a cheesy romance writer. Your characters are real people instead of caricatures. Keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to reading the rest!