All Comments on 'Ashley's Tale - Demon's World 02'

Story is coming along just fine. Enjoying it immensely.

Keep going this is turning into a VERY good story

Simply Delicious ;)

Though the thought of Devon, Ashley's mom and aunt's past lover, joining in the mix really sounds odd to me (I know this is a world of witches, demons, vampires, etc.) but it still seems odd. Besides Devon still acts like a petulant child (can't share his feelings or thoughts really about anything) so how could he survive in a relationship like that? Or in any relationship for that matter. Especially when it seems he's only interested in Ashley. (Though they would technically be in a quasi-closed relationship, just with more people, not like the relationship he had with Ashley's mom and aunt..) The only time his guard wasn't up was when he was banging away on that chick. To me he seems like the kind of guy who would eventually start to try to take Ashley for his own, and then when that fails, turn on her, and become a real danger to her safety because taking two rejections like that maybe too much.

On another note, I've always be weary of succubi stories where the succubus after coupling with a guy, and maybe a few other girls in a quasi harem like relationship, then takes on other male partners. (I'm a dude so forgive me if I think the intimacy between them plummets, then again the main character is a chick, not a guy, so maybe it'll work for me) but even more so, how many people would become too many before people start becoming more intimate with certain people or smaller groups start breaking off to where the point it's not really a closed relationship which would go against Ashley's relationship mentality altogether? Dunno...just some thoughts I've had about this recently after reading some books on amazon that pissed me off...

Anyways keep it up it's a fantastic story, with amazing creativity, and thanks for posting it for our enjoyment.