All Comments on 'Astarte Ch. 04'

This story is so gross. Cuckolding, guys eating cum, talking about gangbangs, girls with now sense of pride other than to hand out their bodies for whoever is availablre. I have to go puke. Barf...

a little bit of everything for everybody, based on the omnipotency of the mind controller (reader/writer).

A good sex filled chapter that is hot and erotic. The dude has so much sex that it's hard to comment on one particular instance. All of the sex was good.

Well written and edited, fast moving and a damn good read.

Thanks for the chapter.

This chapter is not what I expected, but I've known guys like Kyle and I think that he got what he deserved. While still using his new power as a "nice" guy, his thoughts at the end of this chapter make me wonder if he'll remain a "nice" guy, or will the power change him. And if it does, how will Astarte react? Looking forward to the next chapter. Hope it is as good as the rest. RG

This story is sexually demeaning, dirty, gross, wonderful. Anonymous probably likes soft-core porn, which as we all know is good for getting a soft-on.

Dude, what the fuck!? That was disgusting and totally ruined the story for me. I will not be reading the rest knowing demon is some gay sadistic freak! And what right does he have to judge everyones lives? Sure the guy felt up his date then two timed his sister and some skank. But then again Demon tucked a girl he thought was the guy's Fiance!

Why didja have to go and make this gross??

I do like the mind control aspect of the story, I did not like the anal part. However it is your story so keep it up, and by the way your a good writer so keep it up.

I was already struggling to find some form of relatability to the main character since CH 1, Now I don't even want to try. It's a sad shame the story has to try and support its narrative in this fashion. Poor pacing, no plot, flat dialogue, and gratingly presumptive scenarios put this series into a shallow grave from the first entry. This chapter simply put the lid on the tomb for me.

Did you actually sound it out in your head; the sheer idiocy of a woman physically screaming the letters "O-M-G" in ecstasy?

Q

You have a great story going regardless of the first comment. Just keep it going the way you have...enjoy reading it!!

Deon telling jock not to fuck around but deon is fucking around. They both are in relationships with their own sisters. I guess as long as he tells her about it that makes it ok