All Comments on 'Awakened'

Reading the story brought a big smile to my face. Thank you for sharing it.

I so loved this story, it's a huge turn-on for me when an older woman takes control.

so wet right now thinking of you and kit :)

I hope there will be more !

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I love love stories and this is very good and very yummy too! I would hope you continue this story and let us see where they go together! Thank you!

A good story that needs to see how far the 2 lovers would move on. More please.

I loved your work. You managed to keep it believably romantic though it happened over about 30 days. Good writing, one thing, you use "Butch," a bit too often, I understand what you are doing, if you cut it down to about 2/3 of that? I hope I am not upsetting you because you have great potential. "Earthy," is an odd term, but again I get it, I think there are other words you can substitute "pungent," "Spicy," just mix it up a bit. I think you could really write great love stories between women, for the general publics consumption. I look forward to more from you.

Once again you created a beautiful believable story with a sweet happy ending!

Agree with the comments posted on 8-15-19: Too much use of "Butch". In some descriptions Kit is a "strapping" woman, in others she's slender. Generally, the story is burdened with unnecessary words, such as the description of the main character taking papers to her apartment, what she does while at the apartment, and her trip to Kit's residence. This is contrasted with the too-sudden shift when she experiences an insight that, rather than having hated her P.E. instructor, she'd actually been attracted to Kit. Would not this have occurred to her at some point much earlier in her post-high school life?

Thank you...

Like the story,but the line butch woman quickly got old.It took away from the story.

Another great story full of passion, emotion and love. Following other comments of the word butch I kind of agree as in the real world it is used almost as a slur or derogatory term. Almost like slag or bitch, useful for affect but when overused is grating. Not wishing to dwell on semantics but it is used in the passage as a noun, adjective and adverb. Keep it simple!

Nice work though.

Pity people's comments are posted as anonymous, obviously afraid of showing they are a real person of interest and not just a nobody.

"Pity people's comments are posted as anonymous, obviously afraid of showing they are a real person of interest and not just a nobody."

Just how real are you in cyberspace?