All Comments on 'Awakenings Ch. 01'

It is a pity because the ideas behind the stories from Pars001 are good but the delivery is incredibly juvenile.

Its the best advice I can give. I was only about a paragraph in befre I called it off.

JC

Pars001 I like all your stories can't wait for the next instalments

Do not let the trolls get you down. I try to read everything you put out even on Finestories. Keep it up.

Sorry but it is really hard for me to get into a new story when you have so many hanging just waiting to be finished.

Dude if you going pick faults about editing please ensure that you check your own spelling "BEFORE" you submit your comment.

Why, oh why do some writers so eagerly want to use languages they don't know? Russian has become quite popular here on Literotica, but not many actually speak the language... Может не стоит использовать язык который ты не знаешь? :(

It has a lot of potential, but I'd suggest slowing the pace down and fleshing out your characters more. Look forward to reading more!

Russian translation is atrocious