by Pars001
Anons.... There is a process and it is fast some times and slow most times. Be patient. WE all want it but we have to let the author develop the juices to make it flow the way HE wants it. All the story lines are great and mostly 5s. Keep up the good work.
Thank you for this story, it was quite a nice one and I believe everybody who reads your stories enjoyed this one.
I hope you will continue Lost Empire now as it is your best story line as of yet, we're looking forward to you picking it up again
No.........not everyone liked this one. It's one of the worst stories he has written in my opinion, and by the earlier comments and scores many others hated it to. Can win them all, huh? Glad he is done with it and I hope he will start back on his best stories now that he sidetracked himself with this weakness and the other one.
Not your best story but still a good one. Hope to see more of your other stories continued, preferably on this site as this one is much easier to navigate.
I note two things:
- To the one who dissed the scores: you have any published stories in the 4.5+ and 4.6+ range? No? I thought not.
- Everyone who commented here somehow managed to make it through 10 chapters. Why would someone read 10 chapters of a story they don't like? I'm thinking it's just to be able to troll.
You have a good story on your hands, a really good one.
Even i saw many people criticise your work and honestly this story does feel like a big let down for the potential this plot outline contained or even still does, its a huge disappointment. The plot never devolped as it should have, the writing in the story needs a lot of improvement before it can actually be called one of the best stories if not the best on this site
Suggestion rewrite the whole story, understand where you needed the plot to slow down a little and make things more interesting you already kniw where thi gs need to speed up so that won't be a problem, character development also needs to happen the lead character is OPed when considered against the main villan. The plot's twist and turns are lacking
Overall though you did a really good job but it still needs a lot of work before it can be made a novel
I have read just about all of your stories, your a damn good writer, you just need an editor to smooth out the rough edges, with a little work most of your stories could be made mainstream, I would love to see this type of stories become more mainstream.
Re-read after coming here for your new story. If you can wrap your head around it, this definitely needs a second set of stories. Hell, you could go three separate ways with the kids, or go the Three Musketeers route with them.
I really liked this, I love stories about people getting abilities either through a virus or scientists screwing around with people whether they are human or alien scientists doesn't matter it just makes the story more interesting because anything could happen.
you write several stories that are favorites of mine please keep writing.