All Comments on 'Bachelorette Party'

WOW!! Best stroker ever!

Awesome, can't wait for Part 2, I assume at the wedding!

Amazing narration, well its long but engaging!! Loved it with slow paced.

However just missed some lovemaking, foreplay , oral between father/daughter, father seems to tits man- loved it.

Wonder what jenny's rack size that father likes so much. But doesnt find any such scene.

Anyways you pulled rug out of everyones pants.

5/5

Right from the start, the way you described all the "women" was as if they were 18-19 year old "girls". Plus them calling you Mr C. These are adult women, aged around late 20's to early 30's, so it just didn't make sense. Oh well, it's your fantasy.

Very enjoyable story of events. I found the pace to be very realistic and believable. To the point of hoping that the neighbor will play with him as well.

Well done.

Fantastic story, well paced and very sexy, 5/5.

I too am happily waiting for the second part, The Wedding Shenanigans.

Thank you for sharing this epic story.

Yeah, there MUST be a follow up! 5 of 5.

But did the girls ever clean all the empty bottles and cans out of the anchor well?

(A former sailor)

Would love to see a continuation of this, especially at the upcoming reception and maybe something including Mary and Jenny at the same time.

looking forward to more chapters. I expect it will be a wedding reception for the record books!!

Great read!

Enjoyed the hell outta this story. Very well written. Still I have to comment on the dot dot dots. From a retired Senior Editor, I remember finding a manuscript on my desk and it was written well but had the dot dot dots in it so I tossed it in the huge waste paper basket and called my PA in and spanked her ass for it showing up on my desk. She knew the rules and I think she did it on purpose. She loved getting her ass spanked and the messages and the fun we had afterward, lol. Still, I rejected every one due to the fact that a good Author just DOES NOT write/type in that manner. Tell me how many times you've read any type of writing in such a way except at Literotica. I load them into Text Aloud and when it turns up, I hear dot dot dot and that just blows the whole setting. Yes, I was an editor but who wants to read or load a manuscript and hear, "I know it might be out of place, but dot dot dot well dot dot dot I don't know if it's appropriate or not dot dot dot" Yes from the last page of this story! I still gave 5 stars but FUCK, it sucks to edit your admission, when you should have edited it yourself!

OMG, 14 pages of juicy young cunts (and one MILF) with erected nipples and ripe asses just begging to be fucked. What a fantasy.

Nice story, long story. Even with the use of viagra, I’m surprised at how many times he got iff that first day. I’m also surprised that with all those women and sexual activity, there was not one scene that involved anal sex. Anal sex feels awesome. They all should have just gone nude once they were away from the boat launch.

I know what you mean by stories taking on a life of their own.

I loved this story I just hope you continue it at least one more with the wedding and reception. Thanks for sharing😍

Fun Story!!!!!!!!

There were some minor items that an editor could have helped correct, BUT… Brilliant 6-stars… Looking forward to the sequel!!! 😉

i'll join the others calling for more of this!

Absolutely fucking loved it! I can't wait until the next chapter! Five stars and a favorite point!

looking forward to the sequel. Martha, an interesting thought if she gets involved. More nude play at the reception.

next chapter please?

Nothing wrong with an age difference. My ex married a guy that is 17 years older than her (because I was an idiot and didn't appreciate what I had). Our son was like 3 at the time and is now into his 30s and I have to say I couldn't have hand-picked a better step dad for my boy. They adore each other and the guy did an awesome job of raising my son (and from what I gather, giving my ex the kind of husband she deserved because shes a good lady).

Well written, but, thought it was too long and too far-fetched.

Definitely looking for the chapter: Naked Wedding Rehearsal and Reception! The girls sort of behave(?) during the actual wedding.

Fantastic story and a others have said I look forward to the next chapter of the wedding, that would probably be shorter than a camping trip so could continue into something with Mary, etc etc.

While most any erotic story would have some elements that are a stretch and there are some big stretches in this one, they didn't ruin the story at all and over all was well written, 5*

Great Story! Hope there’s a next chapter!

Dido to Piercejl! I HOPE WE SEE WHAT HAPPENED SATURDAY!!!

WOW

Needs a sequel

Hell of a party. A little daughter initiated incest was hot too

Awesome story

Wow, one of your best in my opinion. Crazy and unbelievable but so damn good.

I'm waiting for part 2 I'd love to HEAR ABOUT THE WEEDING

5-star explosion. Reading was a LOT of fun. Thanks.

Great story and very erotic. would love to read what happens at the wedding and reception and how thing turn out for the guy.

When can we read about The wedding reception?

Wow what an amazing story and plot. Can't wait for part 2... any idea when it's coming out?

Loved this story! So many aspects of it turn me on…. I really look forward to reading what happens next. I’m hoping to see him and Shania become a longtime couple, and that he did indeed fuck another baby into her that weekend. It was never mentioned that she was one of the ones that it wasn’t safe to come in, but she never claimed to use any birth control either. They make a good couple, and I’d love to hear about him giving her at least 1, if not 2-3 more babies. And I think that she will have no problem sharing him with his daughters, and a few of the other women too. That said, I would love to hear that his daughter didn’t mention that she wasn’t using birth control, secretly hoping to get the chance to fuck her dad, and maybe, just maybe, her dad could and would get her pregnant, fulfilling a dream she had since puberty. And if fact, she did mange to get her dad to knock her up. It is common for women that live together to have their cycles coordinate. A little literary license could possibly stretch that to such a close group of women also eventually having the cycles somewhat sync up, and their ovulating contributing to their horniness and willingness to get fuck and have him cum in them, even though a few weren’t protected and very much ripe for conception. That being said, I would also expect him to knock up his other daughter too, as I’m sure that she would expect the same privileges as her sister.

I really hope that he managed to get Carrie pregnant too. I’d love to see her remain an intimate part of the relationship, and think it fitting that she has her first true crush/love’s baby first. And perhaps a trust like her husband having a low sperm count might enable him to continue to impregnate her in the coming years, to give her the big family she really wants.

The same goes for Hanna. We know that she wasn’t using any birth control, so it would be easy for her to have gotten pregnant on the island. And I could see her wanting to continue occasional intimate moments with him, even sharing his and Shania’s bed with them occasionally. But perhaps the most interesting woman not really explored to great extent was Abby. I loved that he finally came inside her fertile, unprotected pussy. And I sincerely hope that she too is very pregnant after that weekend. She also seemed very shy and not so confident in herself. I don’t recall her being married either. And she is a physical contract to Shania. I could see her easily becoming part of a three way relationship with him and Shania, with the two women moving in with him and raising their kids together. And her also winding up with a couple more babies by him.

Izzy is just wild, I could see her playing frequently, but nothing further. I could see Tabby, although already pregnant that weekend, deciding that her next baby was going to be a mixed baby, and he was going to give it to her. She seems to get what she wants. And I doubt her husband would be any match to stop her. LOL.

I don’t see much happening with Lillian other than possibly hooking up at future parties as part of their game. But I don’t really see him and Shania, and hopefully Abby, participating in them much in the future, instead content to focus on each other and their growing family, aside from frequent visits from his daughters and Carrie, and possible occasional visits from Hanna and Tabby. I don’t see things going anywhere with Carrie’s mom either. But it would be good for him to fuck the other mother, and possibly her girlfriend. Maybe knocking one, or both of them up to give them a family, and the occasional real cock. With his “wives” permission, of coarse. Lastly, I could also see him fucking the neighbor too now, on a regular schedule, to keep her from spreading any gossip. I could potentially see his “wives” also turning the tables on lil miss nosy gossip, and turning her into their sex slave, and possibly having their man breed her too.

I really hope to read more of this story line. Please continue it.

WHERE's the Chapter giving the details of what happens before, at, and after, the Wedding?

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Great story, well written

Sometimes a bit over-board (excuse the pun) but still ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Wow, two little blue pills could do that? Thanks for an enjoyable story with everyone hitting on Dale, anchored on a sandy island instead of in a canoe. Will need to see what happens at the wedding. Thanks for writing and sharing this.

I only found this site less than a month ago, but I've read several stories. I've found that some authors write the same basic story more than once, even reusing the main characters but with different details and obviously not sequels to each other. Some of them turned me off more than on. Some authors care more than others about grammar and logical story flow (it was bad erotic fiction that turned me into a grammar nazi decades ago). But this is the first one I've found that feels like I wrote it myself. When I got to the bottom of the first page and saw that it went to 14, I said holy shit, but I stuck with it and I'm glad I did. A bit of a contrived plot, but no more so than I might have written. I kind of wish I had taken notes as I went to keep track of all the girls and how many times he did it with each one.

About the comments about babies, well, I'm about Dale's age, never had or wanted any kids, so I'm imagining an epilog where the staff of the local pharmacy remark on the unusual number of young women coming in for morning after pills this afternoon.

Anyway, good story and I will start on the next one right now.

You lost me at 'hosing' a party...

Wow! Is anybody really THAT stupid? Even in fiction? Really badly done

Thank you! I'd give five more stars if I could.

incredible

one of the best stories I have read on this site

One of the HOTTEST things I've ever read! The characters are amazing and realistic, even when the scenarios stretch the bounds of reality a little I'm still all-in!

Ok, no what I was expecting, but DAMN!!!! I think I have a new favorite fantasy. Well done.

This is the LONGEST hot erotic story that wasn’t several chapters. I feel for him as he does have so serious issues to work through but those memories of helping with the bachelorette party will always put a smile on his face. This was an excellent erotic story that most guys would love to have been a part of. Looking forward to reading the next chapter about what happens at the Wedding and Reception and after that. Thank You!

An amazingly hot and LOOOONG story. In spite of it's length I enjoyed it very much and look forward to the next part.

Really entertaining fantasy and story. So very hot!