All Comments on 'Bad Luck'

Very imaginative and very believeable. Sometimes it is just timing and luck. You're growing as a writer, Ohio

Fantastic story and very believable, sounds

like your setting it up for a sequel though?

not worth the time to read.

you arent going to be "discovered" by some talent scout here.

I'm sure the comments will be worth reading as well. Any day with a new one from Ohio is off toa great start. The guy is good. I liked the twisted, non-twist at the end

No other comment. Nice piece of short fiction.

Don't get me wrong, I really felt for her. Anger + drinking never seems to end well. You can see she felt tremendous remorse for what she'd done and really worked to get the marriage back on track. And after all that, she's going to have dinner at their home, alone with another man and let him spend the night. The fact that nothing happened is immaterial. Perception really is everything and her credibility isn't so good right now. So she had some "Good Luck" this time that the neighborhood gossip didn't see him leave the next morning or husband didn't make it home that night. Instead of "Bad Luck", maybe the story should have been titled "Don't Push Your Luck".

That being said, you've been one of my favorite authors and it's good to see you back in the game.

Ohio's characters are always flawed but are all so real. It is a treat to log in to Lit and find a new Ohio story; this one did not disappoint. In this case, yes Maggie was very flawed and R.J. could have dumped her - I think her redeeming factor was her willingness to keep working on the anger management.<p>Let he/she who has never/ever lost his/her temper write the first anon flaming comment.

Like most readers, I'm a big fan of Ohio stories, but this one is somewhat mystifying. Bright attractice woman in a troubled marriage invites old boy friend to stay for the night and leave her residence at 7;45 AM just before her estranged husband arrives. Even tho nothing happened with old boyfriend except platonic evening, Maggie has got to be total idiot who is looking for trouble.

60 Year old George

All of the right ingredients but not very satisfying in the end. And her dodging that bullet at the end...why even bring it up. That said it is still better than 99.9% of that which is posted to this site.

I can't say your best..I've just got interested in your stories in the last couple months... I too didn't care for the ending of this one...

I liked it sort of. I didn't like how the husband accepted that the wife would always be angry. I didn't really like what the wife did to the husband, however I did like how the roles changed. It is also interesting that the wife went out got drunk and cheated. What would happen if the the husband had gone out and got drunk and cheated? Would the story have ended differently? Anyway as always well written. And far better thna most stories on this site.

<p>Something was missing...........</p>

<p>I keep asking myself, if I was in the place of the wife what could I have done to fix this?</p>

<p>In the place of the husband I'm not sure that this would have fixed it. The reason, at least for me, why it wasn't satisfying was this:</p>

<p>-When the husband lay unconscious trapped in his car, that was all twisted up and he had to be cut out of, and later was in ICU, his wife with her temper had took the extra step to go out without him, cheat on him, then when she all all the opportunities to confess or at least let him know, she concealed it and only came clean when she got busted by the other man when she was with her husband. Lying and deception can never been justified with "I did it for you". The honest reaction was "I did it because I didn't want to have to pay for the consequences for my actions, and saying I'm doing it for you is a better cop out". At least that's what I would have thought</p>

<p>To be honest I believe that's what kept me from enjoying the story. The wife's progression from all her outburst only lead to this. Everything she did to show she was sorry (before he found out) was to make her feel better. Because her husband didn't know what she had done, the character was only believing that she was doing this because she loved him, not because she cheated. How can she make up for something the husband doesn't know she did or that she's making up for? And even when she talked with her anger management councilor, she claimed it was for a refresher course and not because she was out cheating on him while the hospital wasn't sure if he'd live or die. When the other person doesn't know, then your doing it for yourself. When you cheat you're doing it for yourself, and when you make it up without confessing your doing it for yourself. Neat circle huh?</p>

<p>I guess the other reason too, was that the victim, once again (not just you, but most writers) is left to try to be the one to work out what the other spouse has done.</p>

<p>I can't say that I thought the wife worked that hard to fix the marriage. She worked harder to party with those 3 guys, she worked harder to lie and conceal her cheating, she worked with Roberta, but not as hard as she worked to hide what she did, but through it all she sat and waited for her husband to forgive her. That step she worked the "least" at. That's kinda why I feel cheated as an ending.</p>

<p>I'm not saying they should have divorced, but things like "Making her husband favorite dinner the day after she admits to cheating on him" make it seem like she's buying him off and equating what she did, having sex with another man, to making a good dinner and calling it a day. That just doesn't make me want to see them together at the end of the story. More like he was just lonely and felt that he's rather have sex with her than try and find a new life. Not that he had to, but it felt like a cop out ending to make it romantic.</p>

<p>But either way thanks for taking the time to post a new story!! (^_^)</p>

-Risq

<p>Any time I start to see 60 yr old George's point its time to find the nearest bar and start drinking till I come to my senses (^_^)</p>

<p>And the scariest thing is I doubt that will make not agree with him "THIS" time >=)</p>

-Risq

In some ways I can relate. My wife also has a pretty fiery temper and when we were engaged and early in the marriage she had some explosive outbursts as well. Over the years she's calmed down in some ways ...at least she no longer attempts to do physical damage. But she also the best my knowledge has never stepped out and cheated when she has been " enraged".

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There are a few points about this very good story that bother me. First when there were these explosive outbursts from Magiie during the engagement and early in the Marriage... after she apologized... both of them would shortly be fucking like rabbits within a few hours. I have nothing against good or great "make up sex" but I wonder if the rapid make up and jump into bed routines were sending out the wrong message to the wife... Maggie.

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The whole Irish fiery temper thing is a bunch of crap. It's an excuse for bad behavior soar like excepting excessive drunken behavior from Irish or Russian men.

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<b>The real issue is that her anger management problem is the essence of being self-centered and self-absorbed. Her severe emotional outbursts that set Maggie into a state

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The next morning after Maggie realizes what she has done and how close her husband came to dying she suddenly sees what's really important in the world. The question is then why did it take for so long to learn this lesson? Why has it taken her to the brink of losing her marriage?

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To be sure Everybody has bad days in the daily grind where we think our particular problems are really the important ones ... and the truth is most of the time what we think is important... is not THAT that important!

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Lastly... having an ex-boyfriend boyfriend slep over in the GUEST BEDROOM... even for strictly a platonic discussion and emotional support in a trying time is probably NOT a good thing to do. In fact it may be the stupidest thing she could possibly do.

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Not only does it look bad... but there are two of the deep problems here with her actions that could lead to severe consequences.

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1) given what Maggie went through... and how her solution was to NOT tell RJ what she had done (even after RJ had fully recovered)... having an ex-boyfriend in a sleep over is a truly STUPID move. Invariably IF or when RJ finds out about this he will have a great deal of difficulty believing the facts. It will appear from HIS point of view that Maggie has not gained control for temper.

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2) the entire premise for giving maggie a second chance... from RJ's point of view... is that she only did this ONE time because of her temper & her drunkeness. Having the ex-boyfriend on a sleep ove even in the guest bedroom... places that critical assumption by RJ in serious jeopardy.

Well written and plotted. But the way she does not avoid

trouble will catch up with her one of these days.. You have to avoid problems and having her ex-boyfriend sleep over was definitely a potentially large one!

The author's ability is what makes this story so good. There are a lot of scenarios that the story could have taken, but with a well planned script, the author led us on a fiery ride of love and mistrust. Myself I would have liked to read another version of Maggie, the true slut, where her husband wants to come back home and Maggie is setting there with her pussy full of Eric's cum. Six weeks latter she has to tell her husband that she is pregnant.The only problem is that she knows that Eric is the father.But that's just me, I love slut wives.Thanks.........Rich

...my first thought when I reached the end of the story was that there must be a paragraph or a page missing.

Interesting twist. Bad luck becomes good luck. Still, Maggie was incredibly stupid to invite Eric to her home, much less let him stay over. Married women just don't let old boyfriends visit without the husband present, even in these enlightened times. This innocent event could easily have ended the marriage. R.J. could have easily pictured her getting angry because he had "left" her, and she was trying to get even. I would have a hard time being convinced otherwise, and I think R.J. would think the same. What's left of the trust is destroyed, and the marriage is gone. We've read the story, so we know better, but that wouldn't have helped R.J. She was incredibly lucky, but she shouldn't have counted on luck, good or bad.

As usual, a well written story. One with several different possible endings. Yes, when very angry, people can do things they normally wouldn't even consider doing. However, she knew he was out working. Even if he should have been late because of last minute service calls, it was work related and it's work and the money that pays for the living. Then to go out for dancing and drinking and ending up in a hotel room to fuck a stranger is something totally different for a, so far, faithful wife. She sure seemed easy to talk into the cheating. And when trying to mend their relationship, inviting a former boyfriend, someone she was even going to marry, to go home with her and on top of that inviting him to stay the night, seems so utterly stupid. Yet, she didn't even need think about it. And then kissing and hugging at the door, after he spent the night, with her still being in her bathrobe in clear view of the neighbours (especially with a very nosy and gossip liking one) is just double stupid. Like some comments said, it's all about perception, not just facts. Sure they talked about her marriage and the problems wit RJ but for the rest she had a nice time talking about their past of some 12 years ago. She wasn't exactly on the rebound, being married to RJ for 9 years but just imagine, if RJ had been a little earlier of if he had dragged this situation for a bit longer, would she be tempted to pick up again with her former boyfriend. She sure didn't seem to think about RJ a lot when she invited this guy. Like I said, a story with several possible endings. Good work Ohio. It keeps the interest going.

You have just gotten better as a writer from your earliest days, & "House of Cards". This was not one of your best, & you know how I feel about cheating wives. What she did was inexcusable; but I could actually see him coming back to her at the end. While I didn't particularly like the ending, given his character & his obvious love of her, I can justify the ending. Thanks, good to see you posting again.

Typical too much talk about excuses from this writer. Bad luck is not hurrying home to date the wife and making the mistake of finding a semi in your path, nor is it bad luck to not trust your husband and be so moronic to not understand that if someone is missing, one phones the police and inquires how to find out if a traffic accident happened on the route.

Bad luck is for those who do not trust in God's Mercy. Bad luck is coming to America from a 3rd world marxist hell and finding America elected a marxist.

The story fell completely apart not on this woman's temper, but her stupidity. Her choices got her into her situation and once again the milk toast husband's choices got him into a problem as he like a thug used a woman's temper to punish her.

The story would have played much better without all this pansy counseling which did no good at all, and people acting like real people. As you chose Irish people to stereotype, you should have chose John Wayne's solution to breaking down the doors or spanking his wife.

Instead though all that was left was playing on stuck on stupid.

Why marry and out of control bitch who destroys things and tries to injure you? But lets just go with the issue of the story. The evil temper is still there, and she lets it fly, problem one. She assumes the husband is late on purpose, funny I thought he was a loving caring husband, and decides to go out on the town by herself, not a smart thing for a married woman to do. It seemns she not only has a temper problem but also has issues with alcohol, drove herself there and does not have enough control to be able to drive home. Then she is playing with strange men in the club, again not something a loving wife does, and creates a potential damage to her reputation and thereby her husbands. Gets drunk, which excuses nothing, and goes to a hotel room gets nude and fucks and sucks a guy, wow and is this because of her temper or her lack of self control? She doesnt go for medical testing after the incident, wow, that is a major no no since it was a stranger she went bareback on. She intentionally lies to her husband by giving misleading information concerning her behavior and when she got to the hospital. Then her reputation is totally screwed by having the drunk she fucked announce to the world she is blow job queen right in front of her husband. And later while trying to reconcile with her husband has a man come into her home and stay after midnight "talking" and then lets him spend the night in her home. Only chance prevents her husband from seeing the man leave. Will she tell her husband, what do you think a known liar will do? And then for the husband to go back with most proper and moral wife, not on your life asshole. She will know she got away with it more or less twice and will have no problem with doing it again and again, after all what he doesnt know cant hurt him! It is so idiotic to take back cheating wives and in this case a woman with severe mental issues just to be politically corrent. Damn the torpedoes, full speed ahead!

This was a nice story overall, and I liked the surprise twist at the end a lot. However, the big problem was how having the ex-boyfriend spend the night was handled. She showed shockingly poor judgment here, and the most astounding thing of all is that never once do we get any indications that having him stay over like that (and kissing in a robe on the front lawn etc) was shockingly inappropriate. It feels like a deus ex machina. You wanted to put her in a situation that looked bad but wasn't actually bad, so you could have the surprise twist, but you didn't think it through. Namely, if she could do that and not even ponder "maybe that wasn't the right thing to do, boy I was lucky my husband didn't see," then she has some serious mental issues. He's making a big mistake taking her back, because if her judgment is that poor, surely she'll cause trouble again. I don't think this is nitpicking. What she did with the ex-boyfriend was almost as bad as the blowjob with the stranger, because perception can be reality. But you take a "no harm, no foul" attitude - it doesn't mean anything, there's no need for her to change her attitude or behavior, since she didn't get caught.

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I'm wondering at this point if the husband will notice some rumpled bedclothes in the guest room whose door just happens to be partly open. He sees it while he and Maggie are on their way to the master bedroom for their make up sex. The questions that inevitably follow create doubts for R.J. all over again. I'll be interested to see where this leads. By the way, 5 weeks is awfully quick for a person to be able to use crutches after breaking an arm. I am pretty sure that one is not supposed to put weight on a previously-broken arm for 3-6 months. Crutches (used properly) don't put one's weight on one's underarms but rather one's weight is supported by one's arms. Thanks for writing.

Good, but i think the story needs part2.

Just figures him finding the guest room with the bed unmade?

"What the Hell!" it ´ill be funny...hahah

Though there was a great deal about this story I liked, I was not overwhelmed by the ending. The story was not so much completed as "ended." There was no literary point to introducing the ex-boyfriend. He offered nothing whatsoever to the plot. He might have, but it felt as though the author tired of the story and simply decided that "it was time for the husband to go home and end the story. Ex-boyfriend's arrival and departure offer nothing that the shrink had not already provided. He MIGHT have been usefully employed, but the story ended before that could have happened. He could have been a useful "test" of the husband's trust (could the missionary ex have really been a priest?) The ending I anticipated was a test of the wife's temper. Husband makes a date and comes in--unannounced--an hour late. Wife must deal with her temper or loose everything. All-in-all, it was a great start, but a very weak ending. I'd add my vote for a "Part 2" to this story. The Cobbler

I do understand that She could have gotten angry waiting for him having the date and His promise to be there on time..Being all dressed up and waiting for hours for R.J. since He was supposed to be home by ""3:30-4:00 oclock""..And She had tried all She could think off by "7:30" to find out what happened and why he was not home and to be told there were no accidents and R.J. was not admitted into a hospital..NO phone call...We can all put ourself in Her shoes..I would be pretty pissed off too if I was waiting for hours ready to go out on a "special date" and if I was waiting for 4 hrs for my date and she was not there and never called."""BUT""" and its a "BIG BUT" She then decides to go out dancing with "other men" at the Club outside of Her marriage and got drunk ..To drunk to controll the situation She got herself into, This women has a serious alcohol problem besides the anger flareups..So She got dragged to the hotelroom and the sex happened,this happens hundreds of times in this country a day..Drunks do stupid things especially Women..Then woke up the next day terrified of what She had done and to then find out about the accident..I believe Her feelings of guild and remorse were real and "nothing" She could have done at that point to change anything...She started working on herself to change to a better person,but the horse had already left the barn so to say..At this point the marriage was still salvageble..BUT now the ""BIGGER"" problem that I see is Her "Ex Boyfriend".. Meeting Him and going for a coffee at a Restaurant to talk about where life has taken them and how they were doin would have been totaly normal and ok,no problem there..""BUT"" inviting Eric home for dinner without R.J. there,that was a ""Date"" and then had Him "sleep over" even though it was in the Guestroom beside the kissing on the lawn, that would have been a total marriage killer if I was R.J...Totaly unexcuseble .. A realy "stupid Women" .. I also thought the ending is missing..

reading your comment ls like watching a spastic pick their nose. You fuckedup halfwit...

This was fairly well written, but was slow moving and boring. Nothing happened. Even the wife's big cheating episode was boring, as close to nothing as could possibly be written. Given how perfect and saintly the wife was otherwise, I just wondered why the husband took so long to get over it. If you were going to bother to write this at all, you should have made the betrayal much more shocking, and perhaps had her repeat it.

Let's analyze this a bit: a hot-tempered woman weds a man who forgives her one night of impassioned stupidity. Yeah, they're made for each other alright. She's the top, and he's the bottom. This is not infidelity and reconciliation. It's the status quo. They deserve each other.

Very good writing, but she is completely unlikable. Her angry reactions are unreal. And then, when she is trying to win him back, she goes out with her college boyfriend, invites him stay over, then kisses him goodbye outside in her robe. She may not be too stupid to live, but she is definitely too stupid and self-centered to be a good wife.

There is a record here, and what will she do the next time. Bad judgment and conclusions seems to be just maggie. It is betterto waive across the street at each other, and say too bad, than the next time provoked by ...? He was on the better path,and then goes back. Harsh, perhaps. Sometimes the desire for relief from unpleasntries. And find a more stable woman.

For this story to work I would have to want the two back together. That means I'd have to see something in the wife more than just a shrew. You state that she is often nice and a wonderful conversationalist. But its to general and not specific. In other words you can tell me that she's nice, but because I don't see it or hear it, in actual scenes, I just can't believe it. I think for this story to work the wife would have to be more three dimensional like your character in the richard g (something) story. Which was great by the way.

She used bad judgment when she went to the bar thinking she'd just dance and drink. So then, after she has made all of the efforts to reform, she has an old boyfriend (with whom she was once intimate and to whom she is still attracted) for dinner, has an intimate conversation with him and then lets him stay overnight. Ok. So nothing happened. But what if they'd drunk just a little bit more? Or what would have happened if the neighbor or RJ had seen Eric leave? She humiliated RJ once, even if she didn't have sex with Eric, and she risked embarrassing RJ again. She may have learned a little about controlling her temper but she still does not use good judgment and, if things go as they seem to be going, she will get in trouble again. This being a story with a seemingly happending, why is Eric even in it?

You gave the wife no redeeming qualities and more then a little craziness. There was no reason at all to introduce Eric into the story, that part was needlessly distracting. And big dumb husband just lets himself in for more of the same grief. There is no resolution in this story. anon jerry

In fact, it damn near destroyed an otherwise good story.

Great story, very well written - I've seen the other comments, and those that are critical appear to be misguided. Maggie isn't two dimensional this is a short story for God's sake, how much character development can you realistically achieve in that format? And Eric is fine too - a nice touch to add a little extra tension, just before the conclusion. I hope there's much more of this to come.

The ok is the things he likes it seems, but just when will she go off, again?

That uncertainty is un-needed, so just end the charade

Theme was ok, but why add Eric at the end? Was it just for a minor thrill of maybe hubby coming home to find another man playing with wifey?

Please find ways to eliminate parenthetical expressions. In a novel they are disruptive and out of place. I found easy ways to reword the explanatory phrases you used.

Real Juicy creampies, just the way he likes 'em

RJ might have taken the opportunity presented by Maggie's infidelity to trade her in for a fertile model.

Maybe she should thank her Lucky Charms.

I'm assuming the reason for having the Eric episode was a play on the title. Her "bad luck" became "good luck" in that her noisy neighbor didn't see her with Eric, etc.

Of course, there was no way in hell that she should ever have had an old fling stay over, whether it was "innocent" or not.

you cheated on your husband while he was in the ICU, he finds out, leaves and in the mist of all this you let your ex-bf stay over and you don't see anything wrong with this. And in typical OHIO fashion they get back together and live happily every after. OHIO should start writing sci-fi.

Cheating wife, but all turns out well for her. Cheated husband; but maybe he will learn to like cream pie. Ohio has the potential to be a very good story teller, but has the fatal flaw of insufficient regard for a cheated husband.

Whew! Would be a sizzler if Hubby had got there earlier! Would he have gone into rage? Good writing Ohio, I liked it. Too bad you didn't have him getting revenge sex with someone else to see if she finally got control of her anger issues! lol

Why does the cheating bitch in your stories ALWAYS come out on top?!

stay the night. After all, it was late and they had too much wine. However, her husband has to wonder if that was really the only time she cheated on him. It's really a stretch to think she would even invite him to her home given the problems she has with her marriage. Guys put yourself in her place. If your wife had moved out because you got drunk and had a one night stand, could you conceivably invite an old girlfriend to spend the night? Even if it was platonic, your wife would never believe it and your marriage would be history. Of course without that part, there is no story. But still it seems such a lapse in judgment that it's hard to believe she would do it.

Quite a switch in the end of the story. For the haters out there, ex's can stay friends its not impossible. My girlfriend and my ex get along great and I don't have to worry about it. It's all a matter of not being a jerk.

Another woman who seems to have learned something - but NOT quite enough -

She was very foolish to have him come home and NOT tell RJ - just the risk of him finding out without her saying it was stupid.

Call him tell him she ran into Eric and was having dinner - that is how to prove your being honest and faithful. Let him decide how to respond - OR - just talk in the street and go about your business -

Sheesh -

INVISIBLE----INSANE WILL always prevail. TK U MLJ LV NV

a couple of paragraphs before the sudden end....the seed was planted for further problems in that marriage by the neighbor who saw the departure of the friend... So the end of the story haasn't or wasn't presented....no end to this story... and the dam parogram would not take the rating i gave it....a single star

now go back and re-read the last part it clearly states the irony of the gossip missing her chance to spread nasty stories because she is in Atlanta with daughter.

Not the kind of woman you would really want for a wife. This woman is attractive and sexy. She's loving as well. But the old girl is borderline psychotic! She clearly has issues.

Not only that, she ain't the sharpest knife in the drawer either. She's let her her insane anger cause her to cheat on her husband. She's trying desperately to get him to forgive her and come back home. In a situation such as this, any rational person with the IQ of a tadpole would, as the Good Book says, "avoid even the appearance of evil." But what does this rocket scientist do? She runs into an old boyfriend, has a meeting with him, and then has the incredible stroke of genius to allow this man to spend the night in her home.

The realization that a person with this sort of personality and reasoning ability would be allowed to vote goes a long way toward explaining our current political difficulties!

is what this Irish lass is. I get the whole anger thing, the getting wasted, and even the possible drugging she went through. She made a true mistake, it was an accident and it was something that she knew instantly was wrong when she woke up. Now, he had every reason to be angry with her and was right to move out like he did. On the other hand, she should have exercised more patience when it came to her husband.

Can't see the husband reconcile that easily with the wife. She didn't confess and instead it was sprung on him and then she HAD to tell him.

When it comes to stories, authors often tend to trivialize emotions that would otherwise be the core of their self in real life.

The man was late and his wife gets pissed at him and sleeps with a stranger?

Any normal human being would freak out at this bitchy whorish behavior and cut them loose.

She is the kind of person who didn't think twice about inviting an ex boyfriend to spend the night without realizing how it would seem to the husband especially given the circumstances.

What happens when they see Eric again and he mentions thanks for letting me spend the night - I owe you one, etc....

She is not just a bitch, she is an idiot as well - bad combination to tolerate for an entire lifetime.

Story is too illogical.

Or normal behavior for that matter? Submit your revised comment after you move out of mommy's basement. Closet cucks have such limited life experience they are by definition unequipped to critique a story on normalcy. I've seen crazier bitches than Maggie in my decades on the planet.

Some of the other comments about him having to learn to eat cream pie if he takes her back are ludicrous. They write as if this weren't a work of fiction and that "they" somehow know more about the characters' motivation than the author. Well, no they don't. Duh. The author clearly explains that the wife's problem was her temper--not adultery. She got passing out, losing your memory drunk and did something stupid. She realized it was her temper and took steps that it would never happen again. And, from the author's words, it was working. She, according to the author, wasn't a likely candidate for future adultery. So why do some comments pretend she was? It's like there is an on off switch in these (usually anonymous) posters' brains. If the wife cheats, then kill her, divorce her, beat her with a stick and the author is a great writer. It there's reconciliation, the author writes like a toad. Given that, why comment at all? You won't leave your screen name and we already know the comment according whether they get back together or not, so why bother to write one?

First off, Ohio is an excellent writer. You can like or dislike what the characters in the story do or fail to do, but that doesn't change the quality of the writing and storytelling.

Second, I really enjoyed the 'luck' element as it was developed throughout the story. Hubby had bad luck to be in the accident, wife had bad luck to have seen the coverage of the accident, but without hubby's car visible, the timing of the call from the hospital and wife's failure to bring her cell phone with her that fateful night. At the end, hubby's 'bad luck' in hitting bad traffic actually was very good luck for he and his wife, as her goodbye hug and kiss with her old boyfriend in the morning would have, at least, put a serious wrench in the reconciliation. Ditto with the nosey neighbor being gone. It was a clever device that shows how little bits of luck can have huge effects on human relationships.

Third, J1M is so correct. The BTB crowd especially go on commenting rampages against authors whenever a reconciliation they don't like (and that is virtually all of them) occurs in a story. They take pot shots at them, call them names, vote the story down, and say that the author can't write. It's stupid. And so are they.

I couldn't be married to this woman, personally. I too easily respond to anger and temper tantrums with my own escalation; so I would never have married her. That said, some people can/could live with this. The husband in this story is one of them. Nevertheless, I could live with a one-time slip of infidelity; depending upon the circumstances. Here, the wife was very upset (hell, with her anger-management problems, you could even say she was mildly mentally disturbed at the time), she got really drunk, she didn't go out looking to cheat, she was almost falling-down black-out drunk when she was led out of the club and to a motel across the street, it was her first time straying in any way, she felt sickened by the whole thing when it was over, she had no further contact with the guy, she was wracked with guilt, and she even took steps to rededicate herself to anger management afterwards. She was a loving, supportive wife in all other ways before and (especially) after hubby's injuries. She prayed to God for forgiveness. She didn't lie about the incident when confronted with it (and she could have, probably successfully). She might have even come clean about what had happened to hubby on her own if he hadn't been unconscious for days and then in a precarious health condition for weeks thereafter (not the time for news like that). That said, I would have to fuck another woman to even up the score, if I were hubby. But, I'm not. I think this is a case where reconciliation makes sense for the hubby.

I thought for sure that she would get caught with Eric.

I agree with anon about realism of the wife; I too have seen some crazy angry women during my life, unlike the uni-brows who've only known their mommy. The devout cuckold crowd like BILLY, huedogg, nwhaler are laser focused on what turns them on - cuckoldry - so they infer additional infidelity even when the author specifically says it does not exist. Living within that psychosis requires denial (otherwise they would suicide) so they make over the top belligerent posts to convince themselves they don't like cuckdom when it is plain to see that they do.

stupid....bill

One indiscretion. One night's failure to remain faithful. It seems to me that any sane man can forgive such an incident. As much as I hate cheating wives one failure should not ruin a good thing. The only thing that bothers me is that if they hadn't gone dancing and met the "other man" would she have ever confessed? As time went on would she have wanted to cheat again figuring she got away with it the first time? She didn't confess, she was caught.

Just one thought to ponder.

the cornhole buggered, the meaty cock smoked, betrayed!

would let her first boyfriend spend the night when she is in the middle of this whith her husband.

"One indiscretion. One night's failure to remain faithful. It seems to me that any sane man can forgive such an incident."

Yep, just like we always forgive the spy, when he says, "Well gee, I only sold them the nuclear access codes once!"

Sorry - it's an all or nothing deal - there are no degrees of fidelity.

shit - stick to mopping floors or cubicle dwelling since logic is not your friend. turn off fox newz and do a puzzle or something you fucking drama queen. cummguzzlers like you drove good writers like ohio off the site to make room for your unreadable cuckold stories.

Overall I enjoyed this one, but:

"If in the first act you have hung a pistol on the wall, then in the following one it should be fired. Otherwise don't put it there."

- From Gurlyand's Reminiscences of A. P. Chekhov, in Teatr i iskusstvo 1904, No. 28, 11 July, p. 521.’

I'm afraid the ex-boyfriend's visit/stay feels like Chekhov's gun. You put it in the story, but then dodged your responsibility as an author to do something with it. Since the theme of the story is luck, maybe after a blow up as a result of this major indiscretion he could stumble upon proof that it really was innocent, if totally stupid.

There was a serious wound to trust, and to me, fatal. Regardless of anything else, with those doubts that were created and compounded. next time is the question....so remove it anf forward without her

That bitch doesn't have an anger problem she must be bipolar. And pretty much brain dead. If my clouded mind can figure it out it's a no brainier. But it was well written, thanks.

The characters were created too stupid to care about. I couldn't figure out if they were married or not when she dumped wine on him.

Anyone who marries someone as immature and out of control as wifey deserves what he gets; no sympathy from me. Reviewers have covered the range of shortcomings of the story most adequately.

Good story, 'cept...

Only one coincidence per story, unless maybe multi-chapter AND extended time-frame! Original wreck - not a coincidence in this sense...a necessary aspect. Blow-job - also not a coincidence. Also tolerate missing TV news AND leaving cell behind AND leaving before hospital called. First 'charged' coincidence is Blow-Job Bull recognizing and outing BJ Sweetie (ALSO tolerate that he is too drunk too early compared to previous contact, and that Hubby was returning from potty...so generous of your doting reader!)

Next series exceeds the tolerance-limit! Old serious boy-friend (who just dodged being her hubby) recognizes her while on short visit to their town. Over the limit! (HOWEVER, married woman - especially estranged - inviting Old [but still hot] Flame to the couple's house and allowing him to spend the night is JUST an ignorant error.) Hubby decides to start moving back to Sweetie - uninvited - on VERY morning Old Flame is in a prolonged homey little scene with Sweetie, and this is a phenomenal and excessive coincidence! Another truck-related incident delays Hubby long enough to save Sweetie's (and Hubby's) marriage, and that is the final insult to your doting reader's intelligence! (Even kinda tolerating the non-typical absence of neighborhood gossip/snoop!)

she is just plain fucking stupid.

Shame he didn't come home early enough to see the guy leaving so he could kick her to the curb cause if the neighbor tells him she deserves to be dumped

no woman is that damn stupid if they love their husband to allow another man to sleep in the house when they are separated. she just asked for the divorce now she can have it she is a cheating whore anyway.

Bitch was saved by author. .. but in real world she deserves to be thrown out....

Hey, we have real life type characters in this one. It takes all kinds to makeup a world. The mental health issues were real and she had the sense to reach out for professional help. She was myopic as well. The author put me on a roller coaster with this one. I like poor Maggie and I was hopeful for her redemption. When she invited her long lost friend to her house I thought it was one of the dumbest possible things a person with marital problems would consider. Especially, when fidelity was the main source of conflict. The ending was a relief for me. I don't condone cheating at all but the circumstances were very unique and only once did it occur. Thank you for the hectic ride!

She is obviously not worth the sweat off his balls. Really pissing ass ending. She plays while he pays. Typical Ohio sorry tale.

I was so expecting her to get caught. Good luck finally happened to her but she did not deserve it. Good story. Stupid bitch finally got lucky. She is not to be trusted, how could she have a man stay over? Even though nothing went on?

I find myself appreciate the skill of the storywriter and the difficulty in using adjectives(good or bad) or did Ohio mean that the husband had bad luck by not arriving earlier? I wonder whether or not she told him about her visitor? Tough one, she has been so impulsive and stupid!

The reason I started this second intervention is that I find myself agreeing with both Risq and Harry. Harry wrote a really fine analysis here!

The exchange with the ex boyfriend on the stoop was a little odd. Your reference to the gossiping neighbor was clearly just to mess with the reader. Not sure if that was clever, or simply annoying. A wonderful tale nonetheless.

Nauseating. You'd have to have NO self esteem AT ALL to remain with such a bitch. Can't even imagine it unless you're a nutless wonder.

'Nuff said.

This woman not only has an anger problem, but also a moron problem. She made a drunken mistake and cheated. Then while trying to win her husband back, she invites an old boyfriend to stay the night,knowing the worlds biggest gossip lives across the street. She got lucky that the gossip was out of town,but if she wasn't, how would she have explained it to a husband who already isn't sure she can be trusted?

By the way, as an Irishman, I'm tired of hearing the stereotype of the Irish having insane tempers. If I hear it one more time, I'M GONNA FIND WHERE YOU LIVE AND BURN YOUR FUCKING HOUSE DOWN.

Suppose the situation were reversed and you'd just invited a hot blonde that you dated before you met your wife to spend the night. Could you possibly be as clueless as the wife in this story? I think not. If your wife found out you would be facing divorce. It wouldn 't matter if you'd slept with the woman or not. The assumption would be that you did and there would be no way to prove you didn't. I just can't imagine even the stupidest of woman inviting her old lover back to her house let alone to spend the night-if she valued her marriage. That is the weak spot in the story. It's just not believable. The author needed tocome up with a more plausible scenario.

Loser took the fucking bitch back. Another pathetic tale about a spineless husband. If he had any balls he would of kissed the bitch off.

She didn't learn a thing, she shared intimate time with her ex boyfriend while her professing to be working on getting back with her husband. There wasn't much of a plot, the ending was weak. There was no suspense in the ending, I knew right away that the husband would miss the ex leaving. Your story was leaning towards forgiveness from the beginning and having hubby catch her with the ex would not have allowed this to happen. When the story sucks no one cares if the writing, punctuation, and grammar are any good. I gave it a rating of 1.

Where do these morons who write these comments come from.

In a normal situation, you can see that there would have to be some acceptance of the drunken stupid mistake that this woman made.

If you find a person who is obviously totally in love you as this woman obviously is with this guy and can not see the way through to accept her mistake, you are going to finish up with a faithful robotic bitch and not a loving though not perfect companion for life.

C'mon guys... this is minor as far as infidelity goes. Maybe a 2 or 3 on a 1-10 scale, certainly forgivable. This woman is clearly sorry and took steps to correct her behavior which she was horrified and ashamed of once she calmed down/sobered up.

The thing I love most about the loving wives category is the variety in the stories and the different characters reactions. Sometimes reconciliation is appropriate, sometimes BTB is, sometimes amicable divorce, or just cutting the cheating spouse completely out of your life. It's funny how some commentors such as cantbuymy always advocate BTB no matter what the circumstances. If every LW story was a BTB it would just be boring and one dimensional.

only hug away from another one night stand or stands... a real piece of work

she ducked one man in the house ... she will think she is too good to get caught

of a selfish bitch.

2 **

Gave it a 1 no real plot, weak characters. Even the little attempt at suspense at the end did not work, you gave up the plot early in the story.

Lonewolf2013

She will cheat again. He will get a cream pie. Will acquire a nickname of "gutless R.J." 1-star because no 0-stars. However, story will be loved by wimp readers.

I was liking the direction of this story. It appeared to be more to this story especially when the former boyfriend entered the picture and the "all in your business" neighbor needed to share what she saw since her partner was out of town. And then the story ended??? It was as if you simply stopped and didn't want to write anymore. Good story, but left a lot of unanswered questions for me. Who did the neighbor talk to if her friend wasn't in town, husband? Does the wife ever tell husband about former boyfriend?

How in the world could she let an old flame spend the night?!

Lucky for her that R.J. didn't come home at that moment.

I hope she tells him, god forbid that they meet Eric at some time and he thanks her for letting him stay then night!

It was how it WOULD have looked to the neighbor if she was there.

Luckily for her the neighbor was out of town, so noone saw Eric leave.

But you are correct, she had better tell R.J. in case he ever meets Eric and that night comes up!

understandable, logical, straightforward, loved it. I hope she tells of her long lost friend staying over night soon, they don't need more complications.

She is consistently a total bitch. She fucks around on him while he is nearly dead in the hospital. She gets caught, he moves out. He is seeing a councilor to try to come to terms with his estrogen driven mood swings about it. He will barely talk to her, doesn't trust her at all. She knows all of this and acts devastated. Of course he cries much more about it than she does. (seems to be a constant in all of these stories)

Then she meets her old lover, takes him home, drinks with him and lets him spend the night. The suspense of the countdown to them almost meeting was mind blowing in its lack of tension. He comes in, she is so happy that the neighbor wasn't home to see the old lover leaving. Once more she put something over on her stupid husband. Must have been such a thrill for her. She is so arrogant that she takes him up stairs right away so that he can help clean out the cream pie Eric left for him. Even if the old BF slept in the guest room, it would still show signs of use. He probably shaved and left stubble in the sink.

Her temper was not the only thing that was going to come back and bite him not her in the ass. She really didn't care, more worried before about the meal ticket than anything, but now that she knows he's okay with everything, she's not too worried. Her lack of respect and probably even real affection for him result in her manic temper tantrums. Good thing he likes that sort of thing.

mainly aimed @ Tootight1

there are lot of things that are not understandable and illogical

"temper not only came from her Irish ancestors" - that akin to me saying, I'm asian so I do maths really well but enrglish not

"Did she do something absolutely inexcusable? Yes. But she's freely admitted that, and apologized again and again." - Freely admitted? Pretty sure she only "admitted" cause she got caught and of course she'd apologized again and again that's what ppl with guilt do.

"Do I think she'd ever do it again? No, I don't" - Really have trouble with this, is this guy this naive? If I ever met person who thought like this I wouldn't know to whether stay away from him or keep close to take his money @ poker this guy has sucker written on his forehead

"And has she tried everything she can to make it up to me? Yes" - Again what ppl with guilt do(have no particular prob with this just wanted to point it out)

"she's been seeing that Roberta to keep working on her temper" - Only after the fact is the reason why she kept seeing Roberta which should be viewed less favorably that what he sees this as

"They agreed that they'd stay in touch now, having swapped email addresses." - This is a disaster waiting to happen your "husband" will not want you to keep in touch and exchange mail with your "first true real love"

As I end this comment I wanna put out that I like this story gave it 3* and I can even get behind the RAAC(I hate RAAC with passion but im not a fan of BTB either) but again there are a lot of inconsistency in this story which has me scratching my head as to why ppl say this is "OMGZ grrreat storiez 5++++++"

Good story, good reading...Thank you

He sees 2 sets of dishes in the sink.

He sees the guest bed a mess.

He sees the guest bathroom is used.

He realizes she is hiding it.

She then admits to having an old boyfriend overnight.

He now has additional doubts.

....not sure how to finish things from here.

You're more off-track than Maggie is...... In her present situation, she shouldn't have any man alone with her in the house, period! Certainly not for hours and hours. Certainly not sleeping over. She is another disaster waiting to happen.

I noticed that you and other responders seem to not have a problem with her being alone with her old lover! No wonder there are so many troubled marriages! You people are SO naive!