All Comments on 'Bad Timing'

then she's dumber than dogshit.

or, stupid.

lousy speeleng. Pore gramar.

1 star.

I understand Tony and I do not understand him together. Yes Canada is other country as the good old States are and the family law is other. I think this tactic is not the best, but to hide a part of the asset for the Cayman Islands or other tax free county would be a better idea and after decreasing the common assets to start the divorce. Nobody can hide the all asset, but instead of the 50-50% may be mended for 70-30%.

I think Tony is not elder and he deserves a beautiful second chance with common children and the North American custom the marriage, against DG Hear's excellent romantic stories the "Reflections Ch. 05.". So the divorce will not be avoided.

A goodt consequence story which obledge the reader to think...........

Or not when he meant nought. Inexcusable in so short a story.

i like that he played that one on her and used the time to get out of dodge. dont worry about people who condemn your screw ups in spelling and shit like that, this is an porn site, fuck spelling - if you miss something you miss something and context as in are and our dont get picked up in spellcheck either.

I liked the basic concept, that no one is entitled to forgiveness. Too often the tone in LW stories is that because the wife is now miserable the husband must forgive her or he is not a good person. Forgiveness is a very complex thing. It depends on what happened, the circumstances, and the people involved. But most of all, it is the choice of the wronged party whether to forgive.

You need an editor! I found the story hard to read.

The idea of not divorcing to protect your money is stupid. Why would you want to live the rest of your life with a noose around your neck just waiting for your wife to find you and pull the trap door and leave you hanging? Protect what you can, get divorced, and start your life fresh. Running and hiding is cowardly. Face up to your life. Tony and Mark are talking all macho but not acting it.

and if it bother some people so much i would spell words wrong just to bug them and i live in the great white north also.

This boring shit sums up a coward of a man. 1*

beat the guy and let hang in limbo

the hung himself was great, divorce is costly cutting her totally off from money is better

some of us wont hurt a woman and he hasnt hurt this one in any way physical at all

a very smart fellow

....this site is called LITEROTICA" not "Pornucopia" you arrogant ass.Author, who the fuck cares about a song by the barely circulated "Blue Rodeo" ,Pick something widely disseminated If you want to hook us into wasting time with self-described "flash" stories that serve mainly to prove the author can write a paragraph taken out of whatever context there might be.

A very sloppy written story. What does following sentence really mean:

"All are friends are still not talking to me."

Should also think the writer should know the difference between: here and hear.

One!

Good luck on your next submission.

Why the hell did you bother submitting this piece of rubbish? At the very least you need to learn the difference between words like, here, hear, they're, their, there etc. Or get an editor.

You're the guy that wrote, "All your base are belong to us," aren't you? If not, you sure have the style down pat.

Hard to follow..

This story might have been better received (comments & rating) it it had been submitted in July!

you wrote this on purpose right??

There was not enough background. I can't tell if what she did reached the level to deserve this type of treatment. This story made me believe the husband was a cowardly ass.

He has kicked the lovers ass every times the husband see him. And he kicked the bitch out, he isn't getting a divorce because he doesn't want to pay the whore. So read the story again dumbass. *****

A one sided conversation until the end then it became clear. thud Gail? Gail? LOL

I heard he was out of town etc. TK U MLJ LV NV

Forget the haters. They don't get it.

Lesson learned.

How to get rid of a stalking cheating whore slut wife.

A. Knock her off

B. Pretend to knock yourself off.

Answer: B. You stay out of jail that way.

OH YEAH

cornholed by a fat cock, he smoked a meaty one, betrayed!

Yew knead an auditor valley baldly.

You really need some to proof-read your shit. And grab some balls, running away like a little boy is just embarrassing. I mean pretending to be dead is actually a felony. Kinda hard to be in Vamcouver when your ass is in jail.

More please

I try to judge a story on four elements

Technical aptitude: How well written is it

Emotive Quality: Can I 'feel' the story or the characters?

Plot: Do the elements of the story work in together?

Versimilitude: Do I believe the story.

You got high marks on two of the four: Plot and Versimilitude. I can believe the story (not that there might not be legal repurcussions, but that someone might do this) and it makes sense.

I didn't connect with the characters at all except for the stalker but that is a tribute to it's length and neither the writer or I can be blamed for that.

You know what I feel about the technical quality.

So learn to rewrite and try again with something a bit longer. I will read it.

Yes I suck where editing is concerned but I have been offered help. I would point out story plot that seem to be misunderstood by some readers. First, it is a phone converstion one way. Tony is not nor has ever been dead. It is not a criminal act to tell someone a lie in most cases. His leaving is not an act of cowardice. How people deal with unexceptable situations is their choice. Our legal system here in Canada is set up to reward cheaters. Tony deals with it by walking away. He should have gotten a legal separation to protect future earnings. You see assets in a marriage are only considered up until the date of legal separation. If he were to say win the lottery after that date his wife would not be entittled to any of the proceeds. Simply legally separate and walk away.

FD45 summed up the situation... His evaluation is excellent.

Thanks for writing, all stories welcome as far as I'm concerned. Love em or hate em. To continue the cliched analogy, here you've dropped the baton and pulled up short. You've shot your bolt, and actually got yourself in the foot. Enough with that already.

I actually love the song. It's completely understated and full of acceptance. But this is a guy who is calling her and realises he's fucked up and don't blame her for fucking him off. But he stays a real man - and he walks away. That would be a story here on LW. And it's been done.

But playing the dead. Whatever. It gave him time I guess. Unfortunately you weren't skilful enough to hedge yourself from pandering to the women haters. I mean one guy got off just from the fact that this chick knocked herself out, fainting. Betrayedbylove was more than willing to alternatively kill her. WTF?? This totally betrays the song. It's a song of mistakes made on both sides. All your friend had to say, to keep in tune, was something like "sorry babe, he's long gone down the road. He'll always be hurting. And he'll always love you." Now that's a stinging fucking truth. That'll hurt.

4*

You acknowledge your writing is bad, and you need an editor; but fuck it, so what?!?!

You are one of the worst writers on the site. Get a GODDAMNED EDITOR and learn some FUCKING ENGLISH!

Thanks for the enterainment and a fun read, I will try and find the song and listen to it to see how it compares. Keep the stories coming.

puts it all in perspective for me.

Psychobabblers are among the most fucked up people on the face of our planet.

and long time payback is the real bitch. TK U MLJ LV NV

you must know that in situations like this there are a couple dangerous outcomes for the little prank they pulled. IF she is really sorry and remorseful and feeling guilt for what she did she might in fact imitate the suicide as so as to do the ultimate punishment on her. Or since they are not divorced, if he did kill himself, all she needs to do is to a lawyer who might work on contingency to find out what happened and then could tell her about getting half in the divorce and she could go after him. As long as he has ss # and credit cards he cannot hide. And while I sympathize with him, he should end it once and for all and move on. In fact if that behavior of his is typical, maybe she had reason to cheat on him: though she should have just divorced him and moved on.

The story had great development it slowly evolved the characters to a nice crescendo of cheaters remorse and revenge. It had everywhere to go and the it hit into a wall. I felt a drama build with great interaction developing characters to human personalities which went nowhere. There was so much at hand so many possibilities. More revenge reconciliation perhaps 'unexpected life event unfaithful wife wins historical powerball jackpot. At anteaters thanks for the tease! !

maybe the cheating whore will feel guilty and kill herself and save the husband from having to giver her half in a divorce.

Check the law. She can file. She doesn't have to find you, just make the legal attempt to find you. And after the waiting period, you're divorced and assets can be seized and awarded to the plaintiff. Your loss.

the Plan A should work but don't forget Plan B, TK U MLJ LV NV

Just so you know how screwed up Canadian family law is, the plaintive is required to serve papers on the spouse. Without being able to do that the divorce can not go forward. We do not have abandonment laws like they do in the states.

You should at least give credit to Blue Rodeo for their sone that formed most of your story.

I don't know the song...but this is a good short story...

ive been reading cheating wives stories for around 2 years and i just now found this guy.. 4 stars

Blue Rodeo did that song years ago. Great song but bad story. You should at least give acknowledgement to where you took most of the story and the story line. 1* only

Preferably an English speaker who knows something of punctation.

Parts of this story are like a verbal pin the tail on the donkey - the challenge is to guess the missing word which would give the sentence some meaning.

now good timing and the Canadian border will keep us apart, TK U MLJ LV NV

To help with cheaters.

Then carry it out with military precision

...why people don't know their own mind, don't see the consequences and choose a path they want most. I guess that is the sign of real immaturity.

divorce didn't reward cheaters.

if the courts outright punished proof positive marriage destroying cheating, you'd see a lot less of it. right now, there's money to made in cheating. if anything, cheating is incentivized. that and a sharp decline in marriage at all. society as a whole is already suffering massively from this shift in society, but everyone is afraid to address it in a meaningful way. aw well.

...and I still like it! What jilted husband or boyfriend doesn't wish he could do this?

This is so good. A little classic.

Added to my favorites

That was fun!

Editors can be your friend. This one needed a lot of help which is sad for 840 words

“All are friends are still not talking to me.” This is a tell. You really need to reread your stuff before submitting.

It’s just a mess.

The idea was just fine. The execution leaves a great deal to be desired.

I enjoyed the story but "are" instead of "our" and "not" instead of "naught" together with numerous mistakes in the use of punctuation marks and some missing words in a story of this length is an indication that an editor could be a big help.