by Dark_Brother
It was great again, though Nick mentioned the nanites while standing before the mirror and said "Ship? So... we are in space?" before either were mentioned by Lela.
I love your release cycle, not too fast, not too slow
You should make it so that the changes made to him from the light treatments and the nanites make him so virile that he impregnates all women that he cums in even if they are using protection.
5 stars so far. Great series
I also noticed the two discreptancies. The nanites and the ship... I really like this series, and find myself checking for new chapters often.
I couldn't help but catch the steam bit. I'm into high end gaming so I knew the steam reference. This is the most imaginative, story driven erotic story I've read here. Really well done. I say only this, the number of chapters is great, but I really enjoy stories or chapters that are longer than 2 pages. With what I've read so far, I know you're capable of writing longer chapters.
Very few errors to worry our small minds with... I don't know if you've finished this story yet; I just keep enjoying the show, chapter after chapter. I do like the short chapters as a place to stop before continuing another day, so write as you like and note there's not a single real complaint! Love the imagination!
Nick mentioned nanites before he knew about what was injected in him?
Also when did Nick see Lela lay her eggs? She says he saw this but I don't remember seeing this before.
I hope he gets all the chicks up into the spaceship together :)
Great story! Can wait to read the next chapter!