All Comments on 'Being a Man'

Very good indeed.

Economical, clear, and well thought through.

Keep them coming.

Why the suffix?

Life can be good. Life can be bad. This was a story about a good life. If this doesn't bring back wonderful memories of your years in high school -- and all the agony they brought -- nothing will. <p> <p> <p> Another enjoyable read from a very talented author.

i saw no big errors and the story was fit for younger paople. Great job, Sir.

It would have been better if it were longer and more input from MOM.

really enjoyed it thank you

great story. Sounds like you had a wonderful and wise Mom. You all liked each other and cared for each other. Good to see that the bullies of the world can be overcome sometimes. We need more of that. Justice prevailed.

but that would imply I have something to say. I guess the best comment I could make would be to ask what his mother having the bathrooms painted had to do with anything?

Anyway, keep writing. It's a good story. It has people we can care about and it puts them into an interesting situation. That's a great formula for success.

Your story was a fascinating slice of life. I too have mempries from the 50's and 60's and unfortunately ( fortunate for me) as I knew two girls affected by family situations. I showed them both great kindness, butt unfortunatel they were too emotionally scared to be genuine in their emotions and response.

As for your attention to detail I loved the part about painting the two bathrooms! I come from a generation and a region of strong work ethic and the Bank of Mom struck a familiar cord. One earns and learns.

BTW I have your psuedomin in a filter that insures your stories don't slip by. I love your take on things.

i liked your story very much keep up the good work nice guys finish last usely i am glad your story he got the girl

".. bared from the ceremony .." is curiously apposite.

But I liked a story about a decent teenager.

Great story about what goes around comes around--and I mean that in all the possible ways U can take it. AT-1 USN

<p>Good spelling, punctuation and _Grammar_!</p>

<p>Finally someone out there knows how to paragraph dialogue properly!!</p>

<p>Protagonist seemed a little too mature and yet too self-deprecating, and the relationship seemed way to fast, given the lack of sparks.</p>

<p>These was one (Freudian?) slip though: 'barred' to 'bared' though in context it seems an apropos punishment. :-)</p>

You might pay more attention to the story. His mother had just made him a loan to go on the date - painting the two bathrooms was payoff for the loan.

As for you, Scorpio, you have done another excellent job of showing the difference between the disciplines of growing up to be truly "manly" (that is with concern and care for the feelings of others) and growing up with too much, too soon, and too unrestricted. Thanks again for the good writing, both in plot and grammar.

That last sentence finished it off perfectly. Great story.

Never have read a tale by you that I didn't enjoy. Keep them coming please!!!

I really enjoyed it, though I wish it was a little longer.

A real good start I would like to see more.

It is true that young women only see the bad boys. It has to do with false alpha male response. It is also easier to dump an asshole then a gentleman. Great story.

I needed that tonight some gentle caring.

hot hot hot

Finally a story that is enjoyable to read and is not about some wimp husband/slut wife or cluck male. A decent story that most certainly deserves a perfect '100". Additionally, it was written well and flowed. Fantasy? Of course, but with enough realism to make it believable & entertaining. Hats off to the author on this one as well as a "few" of this authors other stories. Appreciate your efforts!John

The Taurus and internet didn't when the 60+ year old writer was in high school.

Scorpio another great story. I always enjoy reading yours stories and even going back and re-reading them because they are good. Thanks for the great reading

What a great story where fantasy doesn't distort the enjoyment. Now for the begging. Please write more!

Even though it's fantasy, and even though your revenge stories are well-written and reflect some truth about human nature, I am especially fond of your upbeat and beautiful stories, such as this one.

Thanks.

That was an entertaining story and I like the way you wrote it. I would like to see you continue with these characters in the future and develop the story of after high school and college.

Nicely done!

Thanks for writing a cute heartwarming story. I really enjoyed a great story that did not require a lot of 4 letter words to make a point.

60 year old George

Short and sweet with valuable lessons. Liked the thought that nothing is free, i.e painting the bathrooms in return for the loan. Good portrayal of a young man with sound values, ready for his future. I especially like the short, yet sweet, logical dialog. Please continue the great writing.

Moms are always trying to micromanage a teen's life! Nice story

Sweet without being sickening. Good work and well written. Thanks for taking the time.

Enough said, ;)

You are so prolific.

The first of your stories I've read; I will be reading the rest of them soon 8-)

I liked title, the story explained it well.

Some of us horny voyeurs appreciate strong intelligent caricatures.

I've liked many of your stories over the years, and this one does not disappoint. very well done.

very well done, thank you again

Scorpio

Thanks for another great story about real people. not stereotypes

Being a man doesn't mean pure thoughts; it's right actions for right reasons.

I like this story because the hero wins.... and the bad guys lose.

The sexy dresser / nice girl seems farfetchedn.

I agree with Northlander.

It was a pleasure to read you story.

Thank you.

I liked the story, and the way it was told.

Made for a good read, was smiling at the end.

Thanx. Keep 'em coming.

Nicely done and justice wins

I also had a smile on my face at the end. So nice to see a story with a good ending.

Love your stories.

a good story!

I suppose it's only proper that since they share the same bed, they give each other a graduation gift. A home-made, personal graduation gift at that.

Entertaining story. Keep 'em coming.

I loved it.

I enjoyed it. I would like to see how their lives turned out, either together or apart.

I enjoyed for a short story, could have been longer

...but seriously, let's hear it for the mom!

Certainly a different kind of conquest! Conquering fear and ridicule, outsmarting and shaming bullies...what a guy. I'd love read more about the situations in which his late father and very present mother taught him, not just to make them proud, but to live so that no regrets are necessary. It made think of one of my favorite fantasies: a world in which naturally impulsive kids learn to ask themselves one question first, "What's going to happen next if I..."

If not emotionally involved, sex is like tossing off. When two are involved with each other, good sex is easily implied. More than one kind of graduation happened.

A superb, witty story with just enough unsaid.

Nice story...and the title is appropriate.

Scorpio 44 & 44a,

You are right! I do read your writings but do not give much feedback. I do enjoy your writings.

Thank You!

Scott

Great story!

A little different than most but really, really great!!!

Slightly predictable, but a nice read for all that.

Nice story about the rewards for doing what you should

Really cool story. Should be longer

This was a wonderful, well-written story and sort of a reminder of some of the assholes I knew in high school.

You should have a Ch. 2 but what you wrote was great.

T.T.

Great story! Good guys do well in life after all.

I've enjoyed a lot of your stories. I really liked this one. Good grammar and spelling made your great story easy to read. Please write some more.

Absolutely a delightful story. I’ve seen too many jocks that thought they were hot stuff and failed to treat their lady well. They were not so hot. Thanks for writing this.

Great

Great Read !

THANKS !

Lovely story

Real clean edited and written, a good & fast read story!

I grew up on a huge ranch, miles outside our very small, rural, remote hometown. 510 to 710 population, back in the late 50's thru early 70's.

Our whole school district was so tiny, so rural, that the year I graduated HS with my homeroom class, there was only 127 kids from 1st thru 12th grades!

If we'd of had the 79 passenger school buses back then, I see in big cities now, we coulda got most of the students in our whole school system on one bus and the rest would only filled half the seats on the second bus!

MY graduating senior class only handed diploma's out to 27 kids, (me inclusive). Most of us boys and a few of the most popular girls in our class, was hung-over from the kegger beer party we had the night before, floating down the middle of the river about 35 miles from town, in big truck tire inner-tubes, we had all lashed together, but I digress...

Odd thing about it, from what you wrote in this story author, though the kids in this LA HS senior class numbered well more kids than my whole school system had...I found it ironic, that us senior class boys, had the same trouble trying to date the real pretty and popular girls in our senior class, as these boys had in your story! Same exact reasons!

There were 15 girls in my senior HS class and 12 of us boys. Three or four girls were either ugly or fat or both. They dated no one, I ever saw them with, and 3 of them were really nice girls!

Only 2 of the girls in my senior class were real pretty and well built! One, the head cheerleader, the other, the most gorgeous girl in school! They dated our Varsity team Quarterback, or other sports team star jocks, and wouldn't even look at the rest of us guys.

The cheerleader queen-shit, was so stuck-up, held her nose so high up in the air, if it'd of rained hard, she'd woulda drowned! A real shit-ass to the rest of us guys in our class and HS!

The real gorgeous one, we was raised together from a very young age, our families got together to camp, and our parents to play cards and we did a lot of fun things together, our families, so we two, were good friends.

I finally got-up the courage to ask her out to a dance or two, our senior year. She was very sweet to me, refusing to date me, and the way she did it, showed she really liked me as a close friend, and kinda teased me enough after turning me down, so that I always wondered if she would date me some day. Of course, that never happened...

The rest of the girls often called themselves "Plain Jane's" they were "girl-next-door" young and cute and most well built...and...I did date a few of them!

But the real pretty girls, wouldn't give the rest of us boys the time of day! When we were standing right in front of them, they looked right through us other guys.

This authors story here, showed me, its the same still, to this day, even in the real huge big city schools!

What this very good, so enjoyable story made me realize, then ask myself, when I finished reading it the second time, was: How come the real gorgeous pretty and popular girls at senior class age, loved going out with the football, baseball and basket ball team captains or quarterbacks, but they didn't think the best jocks in other sports, they didn't seem to think of as jocks?

I mean...I was a long distance track and Cross-country runner all 4 years of HS. They would cheer me on, helping me run faster as I won race after race. Our senior year, I was Team Captain and won the championship in Cross-country for our school, my senior year! But that wouldn't buy me a date with the real pretty girls!

What gives, with that batch of shit? One star jock is as good as another...ain't they?

Not so, because I was a champion race winnin' jock myself, I asked the two prettiest girls out several times during our senior year and it was "No go!"

What seemed most ironic to me, is 3-4 years later, I was still using my champion running to put me at the top of my Spec Ops teams unit and wound-up in command, a few years later.

But none of the Jocks those two pretty gals would only date, went to college playing ball, or using their athletic skills. In fact, I don't think any of them went to UNI! A couple got AA degrees in agriculture at the local community college, but that was only a two year degree...Most just went out, got a job locally and went to work!

There's a whole bunch more very vivid memories of my senior year in high school, your great story, brought-up in me again! I graduated HS 50 years ago, so that only happens when the story is well written, evokes the memories out of the cobwebs in my old noggin', by a good author, who writes such a fun, good story, like this one!

5 Stars! Thank you, author!

Nice to read a story about a person with good values, told by an author with a good knowledge of the English language and punctuation. Well done. Looking forward to your other stories.

I have written a couple of stories but lack the intestinal fortitude to submit them

Nice. Thanks.

nice little story about a good guy ,about as close to real as if it happened to you . not sure if it needs a part 2 to see if they stayed together ,etc.,etc.

Sweet