All Comments on 'Best Pick-up Line'

I liked the brisk pace and awareness of risk and adjusting the risque to match . Well played , no pretensions . Both the author and narrator accomplished what they set out to do

Definitely stroke worthy!

worth 5* for the audacity! And a smile.

Or Ma'am's in this case. Not much here but some fucking but it was good for a laugh.

Reminds me of when I used to travel for work. Conventions were a great place to score.

I.liked the methodical technique of the protag but it came across as some clown bragging about what stud he is. That's never impressive.

Especially here, where there are so many guys and gals experienced in and good at, many various sexual expressions.

Thanks for something different than the usual drawn out 3 or 4 page drama, even though those are my faves.

I sincerely hope this is only the first of more to come. Thanks for the story! There are too few good authors who write unapologetic cheating stories!

It's always fun getting a piece of strange that is until you get caught.

At least there somewhat smart about getting some action on the side.

What I don't understand is how married couples can go out and cheat without having the guilt. Guess they have been married long enough that there sex life at home is a bit dead and they just need to fill that void.

I didn't rate it because reading in the present tense is unnatural. I didn't get very far into it before I quit.

Whether Chris' wife is aware of his sexual adventures is uncertain but both Tammi and Sue are clearly sluts on the sly. What has either of their husbands done to Chris to warrant him shitting on their marriage? What justification does he have to make either of them into a hapless cuckold?

Sorry, but Chris' blatant disrespect for those two men is sick, not scintillating or sexy. No one should be surprised or offended if his next visit to Still Well Brewery ends in well deserved pain and misery.

To the Anon who criticized the use of present tense, try reading something other than simplistic genre work. Atwood, Ellis, Didion, Babitz, and others in the literary world use a variety of other styles than just 1st person past tense or 3rd person past tense... and present tense is completely valid.

Try expanding your reading tastes beyond the literary equivalent of a hamburger and fries.

Cheating bastard and some willing whores.

Great lifestyle if you're single---married, not so much.

A manwhore and some sluts are an odd choice to immortalize in prose. The author would be wise to reconsider his "'style.'''