by Wannabe Chick
The main character, Bethany, was so feminine and sexy.
Oh, if only I could be between you, Bethany in front and you in my rear.
I liked the way your story sounded like something that could actually happen. I liked your back ground info and the way eric saw beyond gender and loved her for her great story
I love this coupling, and I love how you make the sex spectacular but secondary to the romantic aspect of the relationship.
they make a lovely couple, looking forward to read the sequels
It happened to me in Porto Alegre, when I had a tranny and became one too!!!
I know adding to the comments so long after this story being written will likely never be read by the author.
But ! I am gonna do it anyway.
This was rather a nice start to what looks to be a good, yet longer story.
Like most of the stories here the use of the word "AND" is way over used in this writing.
Writers, please , when you ad the word "and" to a sentence, Stop ! Consider another way to continue the sentence while not using that word.
As I read this start to what will become a longer experience in reading, at least in my own mind I replaced "and" many times with word formations which made the writing flow so much better.
The word can still be used now and then, just try replacing it with other words or phrases to achieve the desired continuation of the sentence.
I hope this advice helps at least one if not more writers to become better authors.
Giggles, Now i feel like the AND police.