All Comments on 'Betrayal Book 02'

I patiently read both chapters but you shortchanged me by rushing the end. Did I just waste my precious time reading? Did you just hastily concock(hehehe) an ending just to piss us off? If you took one extra day to properly finish off this story it would have been great but you blew it!!!

NOW I feel betrayed!!!

There were flashes of greatness in the first part of the serial with the loyalty to the husband versus ( slut ) faimly at play. in this 2nd part , Amanda went unreservedly to her dark slut side & the tension left the story. All that was left was a rote rendering of cliches.

The good guy won by casting aside his faithless wife but there wasn't any zest or novelty. Fawguy is fully capable of writing incisively about social class tensions in a marriage, a husband literally discounted or self- sabotaging due to substance abuse or loss of earner status.

I've read many of his past submissions with pleasure but this last 2nd part is' weak tea ' in terms of realizing his potential. The author said there would be more then two parts- though it feels like this story is over. As a fan of aspiring authors, I hope Fawguy surprises me & finds some way to go at least 2 for 3 with this multi-part title.

The ending was abrupt but as was clearly stated in the foreword to Book 1 this story is a four parter. The Bill and Sharon interplay has yet to be resolved and what about poor Mandy (or Adam) as the case may be? Does she also inherit the slut gene that her Mother, Aunt and sister share?<P>

Loved the roll of pennies but ouch that had to smart. Funny how I was so quick to think the worst of Sharon before her side came out. That will teach me to jump to conculusions! Except that Sharon is not exactly pure as the driven snow either. Hmmm. <P>

I am curious to see if you try to put Humpty Dumpty back together again. On the surface I do not see how. Talk about lack of respect: Amanda drugged him. She shaved for Gary. She had Bill eat her after having sex with Gary. Gary had unprotected sex with multiple partners exposing himself to STDs. She had unprotected sex with Bill exposing him to any STDs Gary carried. Whoa. Not exactly the loving wife poster child. <P>

It appears that Bill will stick to his guns as he seems to be a forceful guy. Except for that last night and subsequent screw in the morning - I mean really what did waiting gain him? He seems ready to walk but maybe if he screws enough of these fidelity impaired women that will mess up his head also. I eagerly await the next episode of this disfunctional family.<P>

Thanks for sharing.

what made her cheat, to many cheaters in this story, mostly family and friends. yo u ended it to soon. something is missing here. to many betrayals. what was amandas reasoning ,after what her sister did and how did she expect to get away from it and why again. she saw the shit happening why participate in that will reck your life..

Folks,

If I recall correctly this is not the end. Fawguy88 stated at the beginning of the first part that there were more than two books. Like it so far, looking for more.

Up to here it seems like it was bordering on his accepting sloppy seconds with gusto.

Then he decides to walk but I have a feeling he will be coming back for more.

Good writing. Lousy people well characterized

This is the first time I have read this but I will bet that it will come out that she was fucking around with Jill on that week vacation. Not with Jill (although it is possible) but along with Jill. Whores alike. Casual sport-fucking is worse than an occasional slip. I wish the worst to her, no reconciliation at the end, please.

Not as good as the opening chapter. Her behavior is so radical that I am surprised that he did not come to think that she had to have cheated when on those trips. How could she resist then, but not now? How could she see first hand the devastation her sister caused, then fall into the same behavior? Confusing.

This is the point where I jump ship and stop reading. Sorry.

more cuck shit.

As stand alone stories, I've read worse. The story itself is well told, but as part of a series I'm having trouble reconciling that they are the same characters from the first chapter.

Well written but seriously was there a bigger definition of a wimp than Bill. He has a 'plan' so lets his wife fuck Gary on innumerable occasions before revealing his knowledge. Pathetic.

It's amazing to me that the author still lets his protagonist have sex with the whore, even though he knew about her betrayal. Apparently there are men who would eat shit themselves just to put their cock in a cunt.

The next person to enter the house should have been a cop. Amanda should have been charged with drugging her husband. Those pills in the wrong dosage could have harmed or even killed him. The Brits are way too forgiving. I'm sure Gary could have been charged with various offenses for his "Worm" stunt.