All Comments on 'Better Than New Ch. 02'
by coaster2
- 14 Comments
Sidney43about 13 years agoNice story and good development now concentrating on Val and Doreen. Some great dialog between them as Doreen got a bit drunk, but he was a gentleman, as is fitting his character.
Anonymousabout 13 years agoFor a great read. A nice cast of characters, a hero who is a decent man, and several shoes waiting to drop. Who could ask for more?
bruce22about 13 years agoThis is a really fine story, both from the technical details and the human moments. Wow, when Doreen got tipsy she really put a lot of ideas on the table. She is obviously thinking of marrying out hero, but--- what would he have done to fight her off if she had not passed out?
Anonymousabout 13 years agoIt sure is! You have another winner going. Keep the next chapter(s) coming quickly. Please!
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoI disagree that a 1963 jag was better looking than the 1959.I thought it was the most beautiful car i have ever seen.your stories are some of the best ever.thank you.Ron from W.V.A.
KarenEover 9 years agoAmong whatever other issues Doreen may have, I would hazard a guess that old Trip harassed her before hooking up with Monica.
sbrooks103over 8 years agoMinor nit-pick: Why did Doreen seem surprised at Carolyn's interview? As such close friends, wouldn't Carolyn have told her about it?
The "secret" Doreen doesn't want to tell Val yet is probably that she was sexually harassed by Trip.
dunmovynivover 6 years agogood story.
manger a place to lay a baby
manager a work organizer
Anonymousabout 5 years agoPlease put names of speaker to help with context of dialog. Over and over I had to backtrack to figure out who was saying what.
I really enjoyed your story line and detail.
tinfoilhatalmost 4 years agoI read this a few years ago and stumbled on it again tonight. I'm glad I did. This writer has a bunch of talent.
Anonymousalmost 3 years agoEven slower than part one. At some point, it turned out boring. Which is something a story should never be,
Not bad, but feels like watching a reality show where nothing happens.
dirtyoldbimanalmost 2 years agointeresting, good build up but slow. Can't wait for Trip, Val and elder Mr. Beeson to get together with Val's ex, Doreen and Carolyn. Maybe Trip tried to seduce Doreen and or Carolyn?
