The basic premise of the story is very good and keeps me interested. Unfortunately, some chapters do not seem to add much. Others have commented that the number of people involved has gotten out of hand. I agree.
A note on the story Loosening Up: Yes, it has many many characters. A PDF is available upon request listing the characters and placing them in some kind of perspective for the reader. Just email me (see below). Well over 18 ... even 30, hell 40 is way back there, oh hell, o...