All Comments on 'Birthday Threesome'

what a great first attempt by minxette. i think she needs to do more like this and im wondering if theres some hint of a wishfull evening to the story

I would love for my wife, Cassie to enjoy such. Not only would I like to watch, I would love even more to video it for us later.

Good first story attempt. It needs to be rewritten with additional details to add clarification about who is doing what with who for better transition. I really liked the use of the pronoun, her, which gives the reader a different aspect to the story. More of this would be welcome. The story arc is good but additional detail would help. E.g. where did the limo come from. There are no hints as to why it is there. I realize that that is part of the hook at the end and I loved that. I hope Minxette keeps writing stories. This was very erotic and I loved the female perspective.