All Comments on 'Black Box 4.0'

Still really liking this. keep it up

Great story. HOT scenes. Interesting characters. Looking forward to the next installation.

Thoroughly enjoying this.

You mentioned in your profile that this has less than half the readership of Little Packages, that might have been because of the genre you posted it in on Lit. It feels like it could be in sci-fi, and might have picked up a few more readers in there. I personally only found it because I followed you and favourited Little Packages.

Hope that helps possibly shed some light on the low reader count.

Please keep telling your stories. I very much like them. (And I'd buy the eBook of the finished product too.)

Lots of progress in this chapter, loved it.

Wow

So happy to see another chapter. For me, reading this reminded me of Isaac Asimov's foundation books - the story just grabbed me and did not let me go. Thanks for sharing and I agree - all this great story needs is more people to start reading it!

The idiot bimbo killed it for me.

Still going strong and now it’s a shoot out read as well

Love it

Just a thought, but I think turning Lillian into a bimbo was a mistake by the author. Lillian as a possible nice person/possible psycho after the transformation would have injected uncertainty and tension into the plot. 5* for storytelling

Yep, agree with previous commenters, the changing of a psychopath into a bimbo shows the author in a poor light, despite the fact that decision is a step away from what could have happened, it’s childish knee jerk reaction and unlikely to have been the decision of someone that’s just had his IQ and strategic thinking hiked up. That aside it’s an engaging story and I’m interested to see what comes next. 4⭐️

It’s a good story but definitely has a few weak points. The bimbo with no memories, that’s.. just boring honestly. Went from a top notch kind of think to some fluff piece in a few sentences and that was annoying.

Another thing.. a generator as described would be worth trillions. The idea that someone smart would be willing to part with it and its design for five mil is just ludicrous to me.

This has the best sex scene I've ever read. A true master. And the overall story line is really habit forming. Great work. You should publish.

I really liked the bimbo twist. And she turned out to be so talented too!

Not favoriting this chapter, as yes making Lillian into a bimbo was a huge mistake, because it not only read awkwardly, but really stripping her intellect was not merciful: it was very cruel. In fact the entire idea felt so ridiculous that I was scanning or entirely skipping/skimming the section where she was having sex with Mel and Kevin. It's a lot more fun when someone has the brains to understand what's going on and isn't defenseless. Definitely making her into a therapist or some type of trauma counselor would have been so much more preferable, and just to have the different human perspective and sufficient intelligence to accomplish the tasks would have been so much better of a turn then debasing her multiple ways...although several in the comments did approve of that meaning that certainly some readers won't mind this waste of a character.

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It's most definitely a moderate problem that with all these enhanced skills that he still needed Mel to drop an assailant; he should have done that alone, because in an earlier chapter he said to the AI Leah that he could handle up to 20 although that would be messy. So now in practice, he couldn't even handle five--where one nearly got the drop on him.

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I'll probably still read the rest just to see where it goes, as hopefully something is changed with Rosie, since theoretically she could be redone. Right now she's just an anchor you don't want to have dragging bottom. 4